Just a 20-year-old who loves writing scripts and composing music! I focus more on writing actions, comedies, and horrors. I also specialize in scripts that are ridiculous, over-the-top, or just straight-up insane.
Here were my thoughts on your script: 1. Concept - It's always interesting to me to see someone try and tackle religion/religious subject matter, especially in the sense of a non religious person becoming religious. 2. Story - The story was written well and flowed pretty smoothly. However, being raised Christian myself, the climax caught me by surprise for sure. I personally don't know whether to be happy that Deacon was saved or offended by the fact that God wanted him to murder his sister. 3. Structure - The formatting and structuring is excellent. I didn't find any errors regarding this section, so good job! 4. Character Development - The characters were really good as well. I liked Deacon as the protagonist, despite him starting out as the typical drunk. The Shepherd and Mary were well written too, although I would've liked to see a bit more interaction between Mary and Deacon to strengthen their relationship. 5. Dialogue - The dialogue was pretty good for the most part. The section with Deacon and Sam was a bit iffy in terms of realistic dialogue, but that's a bit nitpicky. 6. Conclusion - Overall, this was a good short script. It was cool to read and we'll written for the majority. The only changes I would make are the relationship between Mary and Deacon as well as editing the climax.
Here were my thoughts on your script: 1. Concept - While the concept isn't the strongest, you clearly had fun with it and built up a good story from it. 2. Story - I thought the story was pretty good for the most part. The only thing that I think should be changed is the killer reveal, only because I knew who it was right away, despite the ending. Doesn't that I watch too many movies! 3. Structure - Formatting and structuring was pretty much perfect here. I didn't find any errors regarding structure or anything related. Very nice job. 4. Character Development - The main characters were introduced nicely and written well. However, the side characters at the beginning don't get as much love since we're told who they are, and not really shown, mainly because they don't have much script time. 5. Dialogue - The dialogue felt very realistic and exactly how I'd imagine it would sound. It was genuine and spot on, so great job here! 6. Conclusion - This was a pretty good script in my opinion. If the side characters got a bit more attention or build up as well as a less predictable ending to the story, this script will practically be flawless!
After getting fed up with evil winning in the end of horror movies, a man decides to take matters into his own hands.
Carrie's week is going miserably and camp doesn't seem to help. Neither does the fact that there's a killer loose on the campgrounds hellbent on being remembered by his childhood bullies.
After dying in a car accident, Johnny Seth is about to face judgment, that is until Satan gets God's permission to bring Johnny back to life, only for his plan to go south.
The torment was too much for him to handle, and now he's gonna make sure everyone has a jolly good time!
A schizophrenic man loses his sanity after his singing audition for a talent show goes wrong.
A tale of abuse, hatred and vengeance
Teens learn the hard way that if they don't comply and pass on the messages, they pay the price for breaking the link.