Here were my thoughts on your script: 1. Concept - I liked the concept you went with. More of a mystery horror/thriller instead of a basic horror and you seemed to have fun with it. 2. Story - I feel like this is where the script falls flat for me unfortunately. It could be my fault since I binge watch horror a lot, but the ending and climax were pretty predictable. I think it could've been a more out of the box ending where he somehow gets taken into the picture instead of just the "FINAL DESTINATION DEATH" trope. 3. Structure - The structuring and formatting is spot on here. The entire script was cleanly written and was very easy to read through, so good job on that! 4. Character Development - I liked how each character was written, whether they had a lot of script time or not. Russell was definitely a good protagonist, it's just ashame the ending is how it is. 5. Dialogue - The dialogue felt almost exactly how teenagers would talk. I think the only less natural scene was with the three guys talking about the picture and it gets suggestive. Nothing wrong with suggestive, but it's gotta sound more genuine. 6. Conclusion - This was a pretty good short script. Characters, structure and dialogue were all very good. I would just make the story less predictable personally. Good job though!