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Cowspiracy Ep 1

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The birth of a baby cow produces hope for a struggling farmer but also an unforseen detrimental magic

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Draft #2
Peer Rating: 57%
Industry Rating: 7%
Draft 2: 57%
3 Reviews | 51 pages | 4 months ago | Draft 2

Summary

William who is a farmer had to get rid of most of his cows because of an illness they contracted from eating grass. He is left with 4 cows that have trouble producing babies. He gets help from his son Tagger to birth a baby cow.

Industry Reviews

Industry

A student returns to his home farm and wonders whether the recent cow deaths are linked to the new research facility just up the road.
Writing is a skill that takes many years to learn and requires a lot of study and work. I would recommend that you read a few books on screenwriting. Story by Robert McKee is a great book that covers the basics of storytelling for the screen. There are also many (professional) scripts available online and reading these will greatly help develop a writer's skill. In terms of this story, the best approach is to to find a specific goal for the prota...

2 months ago | read more...
Blaise Hesselgren Top Reviewer

Peer Reviews


Wacky concept just needs the story to kick in sooner and the dialogue errors revised
Overall, this was a fair first episode for Cowspiracy. As mentioned above, I would mainly focus on fleshing out your main characters more to make the story more engaging and revise the dialogue to remove any errors. Good luck!

4 months ago | read more...
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer

On reading to Log Line I was hesitant regarding a cow that saves a farm and unfortunately with only 30 pages to read I was unable to get an idea of how the story would progress. I would interested to see how the story progress as the dialogue and characters where very good.
I would very much like to read more from this writer, they have a natural style and have displayed that they have written before and have talent. I would still be interested to find out how the story progresses and how the story works around a cow and what its powers are. The writer has demonstrated a good level of skill and a natural flow.

3 months ago | read more...
Glen Smith

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The birth of a baby cow produces hope for a struggling farmer but also an unforseen detrimental magic