Raise your script the write way.

HASTINGS and LAWSON dialogs read like the same person. I would make one strong and one weak. LAWSON Wait, where the hell did you get an E-M-P? HASTINGS I’m an amateur electrician in my off-time. Where the hell do you think I got it? To LAWSON Where the FUCK did you get an E-M-P? HASTINGS I’m, I'm... My dad was electrician and I pick up a few things from him. I lost interest at page 30. It like spy does this and spy dose that. I'm not reading any emotions from the page. I'm not into the story. All the characters are the same. Like when Lawson is in the bar and has no clue how to deal with her. Hasting tries to help through a window? Huh how is that help?