1. Concept - I liked what you went with for the concept. Having a troubled son and his wife try to follow in the footsteps of his father in the hitman business. I thought that was great!
2. Story - The story started out fairly good in the first act. However, a bit into the second act, it starts going in multiple directions that are a bit hard to follow along with. I think if it was tied together more wi...
When a mob boss uses dangerous methods to fix horse races on Derby Day, a corny joke telling handicapper, executing his own safe cheating scheme, battles to turn some asinine cheats against the mob enforcer before the horses he loves are hurt.
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