Overall I find that this is a nice and overall easy script to follow, but it is very short and with television scripts try and aim for at least 27 pages, but take everything thatI say as feedback it is a good script as I said, very relatable characters and overall a premise that wouldn't look outdated on the likes of Netflix and Amazon, but the length is the main thing that is letting it do, it doesn't do it justice it just keeps pushing it down. It also is outdated slightly with some of the terms that you use for when characters speak like 'Twerp'. But it also does a good job of character but you keep it to a limit that also pulls it down as I wanted to see what the characters goals in the long-term are, you make Michelle out to be some-kind of badass who knows everyone and everything, also you rush straight into the plot and it do without giving any type of backstory something which does not allow for us to fully connect with the characters. But now for what I did like and enjoy, I enjoyed reading through it and it surprised me, like I said there was nice character development over the course of the episode for both Kim and Michelle but at the same time, the character of Patrick really slows the plot and the premise down and hurts it. And something else that I can't ignore is the fact that you ended the script on a the start of a scene. Michelle's children are a nice welcome though as it gives more development to an already great main character but shy's away from what the group that was referred to at the beginning, I totally have faith in this project and I know that if you correct some mistakes then it would be a script that would easily sell in Hollywood And I am looking forward to reading more of it.