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An Accidental Courtesy


When the eight-year-old son of a white supremacist befriends and African American, he must struggle to keep his family and friend from finding out the truth of each other...

Draft #1
Peer Rating: 64%
Industry Rating: N/A
2 Reviews | 140 pages | 1 month ago | Draft 1


Martin is an eight-year-old boy who only wishes to have a true friendship with another kid. One day he and his parents move to a small town in Illinois, and he befriends a young African American boy named Ben. But there's just one problem, Martin's parents are neo-nazis...

(Contains heavy course language).

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All in all, this was a great read that tackled serious subject matter well without teetering into the dreaded woke territory. The only things I can recommend are remove the two unnecessary characters and changing up the dialogue lines to make it flow even better. Good luck!

1 month ago |
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer
Is the Concept strong/original? No, I have seen this story before. The ending is kind of new.

Are scenes well-written? They are just so-so. They are long and drawn out.

Is the protagonist/antagonist compelling enough? You have two protagonist, the boys and two antagonist, the fathers. I would have had Ben's father earlier in the script. It fine where you introduce him, but because he is on of the antagonist maybe a good change would have hi...

1 month ago |

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