ANTRIM television
#Crime #Family
By
Reece
Allen
Follows the life of a young Northern Irish loyalist paramilitary member and his ex-paramilitary uncle in prison.
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Nominee Draft #1
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1 Reviews |
29 pages |
2 years ago
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Draft 1
In a small Northern Ireland town, a loyalist paramilitary group called the UVF takes the law into their own hands. A young member named Leo dances between everyday life and crime. His uncle Dec, an ex-paramilitary member, serves time in prison, but things worsen when a new batch of inmates join.
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Overall, this is a decent first draft for the pilot episode of Antrim. The only things I would really recommend focusing on for the second draft would be cutting down on the action lines, making them shorter, as well as cutting out any repetitive or unnecessary dialogue. Good luck!
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