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By Cyle Brooks

A troubled teen leaves a note for his parents.

Peer Rating: 44%
Industry Rating: N/A
2 Reviews | 1 pages | 9 months ago | Draft 1


A troubled teen leaves a note for his parents on an unsuspecting night.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

Ok, I don't really know what to say here, seeing as this is only one page. I don't really understand why this guy killed his parents, he said he was tormented but that really doesn't say much. Again since this is just a one-page script, I didn't know anything about anyone so I didn't really care at all that they were dead. Also, I'm guessing since he was tormented we're supposed to be emotionally connected to this guy? Doesn't really work.


9 months ago |
Marlon Schwiersch Top Reviewer
I like where you went with this script. It was so dark and psychological. I could see it happening, so props for that. A couple of things I wanted to run by you. I don't think beats are necessary for this script in particular only because of the duration and it looks like you're only doing a one location type of film. On page one, instead of having Mom and Dad are sitting across from Brother and Sister, you could probably put Mom and Dad sit acr...

8 months ago |
Amari Russell Top Reviewer

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