A strong concept, as a fan of the Buffy universe I enjoyed reading a continuation of the mythos of the slayers. I especially liked a new lead one who has ties to the previous stories as oppose to using existing characters as the main focus. It builds a big picture well but i think the small scale is lacking. Slow down the pace and develop Zoe and search for the Travalthon will help make it a more substantial story. I am looking forward to see where these characters go.
The first thing I will say is that this is episode three, I have not read the other two. I was assigned it so as a result I had little context of the characters and the plot etc. It took a little while to get into the story, I also struggled to find a main character, is it Ella Divine or Ghost Writer or Dr Gabe. These issues again I think are a result from only reading the third chapter, but something to consider. However, after reading this chapter I would really need to read the first two. However that being said after reading this, I want to read the first two. It is very fast paced and constantly moving. What i like most is the religious aspect and the different characters fighting on different fronts. I also think it is very interesting using the pandemic as a back drop to hold religion up for closer inspection. It is a very clever concept. The tension and mystery of the broken circles and the emissary really pull me into the story and make me want to read more. It is well structured and the character descriptions are all clear. Because there are so many characters I think the dialogue can be very similar and its hard to distinguish individual voices. Especially in the scene with Rebecca and Karla or the CEO and the Emissary. I do love how Maria and Congressman Garcia use Spanish, I feel it provides an authentic touch. I think this is a good screenplay and would happily read more as I am interested in where it is going.