Zack Hosseini

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A pastor's estranged son begins intercepting strange TV broadcasts from a mysterious deity, known only as The Shepherd, that inspire a novel and radical religious awakening of his own.
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Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

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A Cotton Moon short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Drama
A pastor's estranged son begins intercepting strange TV broadcasts from a mysterious deity, known only as The Shepherd, that inspire a novel and radical religious awakening of his own.
ZackHosseini
Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

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Mad Talent short
Genre: Comedy,Horror
Rating: 53%
MAD TALENT is a fun, fast-paced short that uses its story to do what it's intended to do and little more: get us to the gory grand finale. Though it's a familiar concept that lacks much thematic depth or character development, not all shorts are meant to provide heavy-hitting drama. This is one of those shorts. Much like other films that fall into this category — Kung Fury and Death Proof come to mind — the short's ultimate success will rely on expert execution of the directing, performances, and special effects. I would suggest in any rewrites that writer Cyle Brooks give Jeff slightly more development that leads to this audition being the breaking point for him. Perhaps he has sent in a demo tape to a record label, received an insulting letter in response, and in the first scene, we learn this and see Jeff writing a song using lines from the insulting letter. Perhaps we also see a flyer that gives us an indication these same record executives are the ones holding open auditions in search of new talent. Then we'd see this as him giving them one final chance to appreciate his raw talent before blowing them all to smithereens. I think it'd also be great to have him bring the guitar (in a case, so the viewers don't know there's anything special about it) to the audition to help build mystery and suspense. When they laugh in his face, he runs to the bathroom where he's hidden the guitar, speaks to the incarnation of The Metal in his mind (it might be fun to do it similarly to how Norman Osborne "speaks" to his Green Goblin alter-ego through the mirror in Sam Raimi's Spider-Man film), and retrieves the guitar. I think he could also extend the gory, grand finale. That's the huge, memorable part of the movie and I think he should have as much fun with it as he can come up with. Overall, big fan of the potential this has. It seems like the kind of fun short film some stoners would watch on Adult Swim in the middle of the night. Best of luck with it!
ZackHosseini
Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

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A Cotton Moon short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Drama
A pastor's estranged son begins intercepting strange TV broadcasts from a mysterious deity, known only as The Shepherd, that inspire a novel and radical religious awakening of his own.
ZackHosseini
Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

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Mad Talent short
Genre: Comedy,Horror
A schizophrenic man loses his sanity after his singing audition for a talent show goes wrong.
ZackHosseini
Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

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A Cotton Moon short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Drama
A pastor's estranged son begins intercepting strange TV broadcasts from a mysterious deity, known only as The Shepherd, that inspire a novel and radical religious awakening of his own.
ZackHosseini
Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

just purchased a review. Claim it here

A Cotton Moon short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Drama
A pastor's estranged son begins intercepting strange TV broadcasts from a mysterious deity, known only as The Shepherd, that inspire a novel and radical religious awakening of his own.
ZackHosseini
Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

just purchased a review. Claim it here

A Cotton Moon short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Drama
A pastor's estranged son begins intercepting strange TV broadcasts from a mysterious deity, known only as The Shepherd, that inspire a novel and radical religious awakening of his own.
ZackHosseini
Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

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A Cotton Moon short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Drama
A pastor's estranged son begins intercepting strange TV broadcasts from a mysterious deity, known only as The Shepherd, that inspire a novel and radical religious awakening of his own.
ZackHosseini
Zack Hosseini 3 years ago

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