Overall, this story isn't essentially bad; it only needs a second draft. The philosophical conflict is almost enough, and the concept works quite well. The structure is the only one that needs to be improved a little more; ensure the resolution concludes the story and you're more than halfway there.
When a high level black excutive is hired racism ensues. After he is falsly charged with embezlment he turns the tables on the company. He uncovers almost 18 million dollars in funds stolen funds from the nations police departments.
Trying his best to not get swallowed up by the streets of Southside Jamaica, Queens, Trey maneuvers through the standard baby momma drama, systemic racism and socio-economic disenfranchisement that his hood brings, but little does he know that this is the last day of his life.
When the inspector Dimitrije Berisha finds the only eyewitness to a case, an autistic child, he has no choice but to partner with the victim services worker, Malik, to stop serial killings.
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