Charm City Paranormal is a great read but does have some structural issues. In the next draft, I would advise bringing the story of the week to an end and using that to reveal new information that really pushes us into the serial story. While doing this I would also ensure that all the main structural beats - the inciting incident, the midpoint, the low point and the climax all relate to the case of the missing Eric. But it's a great world and we...