Tyler Robertson

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3 weeks ago
Pokémon: Poke Cup television
Genre: Family,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: A Pokémon fanatic run away to live with her aunt and pursue her dream of being a Pokémon trainer.
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First Visit feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: A police officer and a local recluse form an unlikely friendship while investigating extraterrestrial activity in their small town.
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James Bond 007-Long Love Lost short
Genre: Action/Adventure,Mystery/Suspense,Drama
Logline: Bond has a wild adventure ahead of him with his arch nemesis Blofeld.
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Basket Case television
Genre: Family,Drama,Comedy
Logline: A sheltered and socially awkward high school student decides to find his place in life after the death of his extremely overbearing mother.
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First Visit feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: A police officer and a local recluse form an unlikely friendship while investigating extraterrestrial activity in their small town.
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Basket Case television
Genre: Family,Drama,Comedy
Logline: A sheltered and socially awkward high school student decides to find his place in life after the death of his extremely overbearing mother.
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3 months ago
Infinite rooms ep 1 television
Genre: Action/Adventure,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
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Overall, I would say that this concept shows promise. Some side characters and their stories could probably use to be more fleshed out and I would urge to add more meat leading up to Jay flying out to his new job. I like the tone, the plot, and Jay as a character. You also ended the screenplay in a manner that serves as a good hook to the audience. Definitely work on the dialogue being more natural. I already mentioned the expositional dialogue coming off as sounding very contrived, but even some of the usual banter between Jay and Orvis sounds a bit too false. Some of Orvis' dialogue about Jay being agnostic sounds more like dialogue from a professional counselor and not a teenager struggling to get by on the streets. I also can't help but question Tim. Why are all of his lines "Yes" in conversations to where it doesn't make any sense? Is he suppose to be mentally off in some way? If so, that needs to be established to the audience in some way. You show signs of competent writing the characters struggles and having a good story to back them up, just work on the dialogue heavily. There's too much exposition here. Think of ways to visually show the audience some of these things or come up with more clever ways to reveal it through dialogue. Jay's mother doesn't need to explain her whole backstory of being kicked out after getting pregnant to her own husband. He already knows, so there's no need for her to blatantly say it like that. Just focus on making the dialogue sound more natural. That's the biggest thing that I recommend.

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3 months ago
Infinite rooms ep 1 television
Genre: Action/Adventure,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: A guy explores fictional places but his limits are tested when enduring dangerous situations.

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Basket Case
Draft #1
Genre: Family,Drama,Comedy
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A sheltered and socially awkward high school student decides to find his place in life after the death of his extremely overbearing mother.

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A police officer and a local recluse form an unlikely friendship while investigating extraterrestrial activity in their small town.

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