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By Cyle Brooks

A man deals with the consequences of his addictions in his personal and work life.

Draft #1
Peer Rating: 64%
Industry Rating: 60%
3 Reviews | 10 pages | 5 months ago | Draft 1


Carl, a middle aged retail worker, struggles with the consequences and effects of his addictions in his everyday work life and his personal life up until the consequences grow too dire.

Contains explicit sexual content, graphic nudity, language and disturbing material.

Industry Reviews

The Script works very well on a craft and a structural level. Currently, the ending and medical explanation are a bit unclear but other than that the story needs more heart and that comes from having empathy with the protagonist rather than condemning him. To do this the short should dig into the protagonist's internal world and see him more as a tragic hero examining why he suffers this addiction rather than condemn him for being unable to overc...

4 months ago |
Blaise Hesselgren Top Reviewer

Peer Reviews

Overall, the story and character of Carl was bittersweet. He was just an average guy with an average job, but when his liver goes out, you find out all of this other stuff about him as a person right before the end. The fact that it ended right before we realize it and wanted to see what happens next with him and everything else, is what made it that way. It was over before it begun.
I think there is room for improvement here, only if you choose...

5 months ago |
Michael Kibler Top Reviewer
Good read. Very unusual concept but it was certainly interesting. I think if you focus more on the characters and the ending, it could be really good. But in conclusion, it's a pretty interesting and good script and I look forward to your future work.

5 months ago |
Marlon Schwiersch Top Reviewer

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