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D Scott Mangione

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Favorite Genres:
To write: Family sagas
Historical fiction
Westerns. To watch: Hard science fiction

I retired from teaching {mainly 6th-grade life science) when the time was right to finally pursue my passion. I learned the format from youtube videos then wrote my first screenplay. I was accepted into a 6-month one-on-one mentorship with Scott Myers who wrote K-9 and many others. I am now working on my 7th feature screenplay. It has been nearly impossible to get anything read so I was excited to come across this site. I will do my best to give beneficial reviews. My main goal now is to get a positive referral to a manager that leads to representation. I am ready for that and I think this site may be my best chance to make that happen.


Reviewer Rating:
Scripts: 11
Reviews: 9

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Appalachian Ghosts feature
Genre: Thriller,Horror,Romance
Logline: A forty-nine year old man from England moves into his fiancée's house in the Appalachians. His sinister plan is threatened when he encounters the ghosts of her dead relatives.
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1 week ago
The Silver Bullet feature
Genre: Action/Adventure
Review Rating:

You finished a screenplay and that in itself is a big accomplishment but a screenplay is written for the sole purpose of becoming a movie. For that to happen, it must be read and this script is almost unreadable. Unfortunately, a reader would not get past page 5 because of the mistakes in spelling, grammar and format. The story and characters may be great but if the script doesn't get read, no one will know it. On page 2: eliminate camera direction "close up". That is a decision for the director or cinematographer. Page 3: "both watches" should be both watch. Capitalization of sounds, "BOOM", and "METEORITE" unnecessary. Only a distraction. "Rani opens up tent crawling out slowly.' Should be: "Rani slowly crawls out of her tent." "SCOUTER looks into a something unusual" should be " Scouter sees the meteorite has cracked open. You already capitalized scouter. Don't need to again. "We don't what it is" should be we don't know what it is. "Rani rushes into the crate", into should be to. "Rani gets closer, she flashes the small, alive thing comes out of the shell." Not sure what that is. Do not capitalize words in dialogue. "holds it. Then", should be "holds it then. No comma between cry and then. "campers goes" should be "campers go". Page 4: eliminate unnecessary transition directions. "Late 40s/Early 50s, four-eyed" Should be set apart by commas not parenthesis. Eliminate bne. Came should be come. It should be It's. No "the" in front of SETI. "do need" needs to be "do we need" I pointed out the mistakes on the first 4 pages to illustrate the care that must be taken to correct errors like that throughout the entire screenplay before publishing. Keep writing just be more careful correcting obvious mistakes. I would like to read this again without the mistakes. I promise your ratings will improve dramatically.

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1 week ago
The Silver Bullet feature
Genre: Action/Adventure
Logline: An aspirant wrestler finds out about the plot from secret organization and attempt to take over the world by an agent. She needs to find the formula and prevent it from falling into the wrong hands.
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1 week ago
Appalachian Ghosts feature
Genre: Thriller,Horror,Romance
Logline: A forty-nine year old man from England moves into his fiancée's house in the Appalachians. His sinister plan is threatened when he encounters the ghosts of her dead relatives.
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2 weeks ago
Thoughts feature
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
Logline: Three strangers find themselves in a mysterious place surrounded by darkness. They attempt to determine why they are there only to discover a terrifying truth.
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2 weeks ago
Gnarly Vines feature
Genre: Comedy,Horror,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Review Rating:

Great script. Two half-sisters possessed by demons from another dimension fight each other with the world at stake is a very good concept. Setting the script during the Rodney King riots made the story original and even more interesting. The first act was thoroughly entertaining. It was paced well, set the genre perfectly and set up the story in a way that made you want to keep reading. Very easy read. The chemistry between Charlene and Raven was excellent. So was the relationship between David and Annie. The scene with David and Annie overlooking the pacific coast would make a great opening image. Consider showing David speaking with Annie at the beginning of David's speech then cut to the vineyard scenes then back to them. V.O. is always in parenthesis and is for narration not known to the characters. (O.C.) or off camera would be appropriate in this case. Having the wolf's name pronounced Volfa was a nice touch. The story got a little confusing when Elena, Jesus and Sergio entered. I believe they were involved in the Santeria religion but I did not detect any connection to what Annie and Charlene were into. Establishing some connection there could truly enrich the story. The ending was kind of abrupt. Adding a few pages with a surprising twist near the end or a stronger resolution showing how everything has changed could make the script even more impactful. Some of the speeches were long. Try adding more action or another character speaking to break them up. Get rid of the typos, there shouldn't be one, they are easy to fix, make sure that there's none. Overall, a very good screenplay. I recommend script and writer.

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2 weeks ago
Gnarly Vines feature
Genre: Comedy,Horror,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: A young woman on the run from an alien worshiping cult must decide to rescue what remains of her broken family or start a new life on the run.
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3 weeks ago
The Photograph short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror,Thriller
Logline: One simple photograph can change a person's life, for better or worse.
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4 weeks ago
Silence of the Land feature
Genre: History,Romance,Western
Logline: In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos and he must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.

Scripts

Christmas Cards
Draft #1
Genre: Family
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When his father is rendered unable to work, an imaginative young boy sets out to sell Christmas cards to raise money and help his poor family celebrate the holidays.

Thoughts
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Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
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Three strangers find themselves in a mysterious place surrounded by darkness. They attempt to determine why they are there only to discover a terrifying truth.

Silence of the Land
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Genre: History,Romance,Western
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In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos and he must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.

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Caught in Katonah
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Genre: Drama
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Trapped in his hometown because he has to support his family, an impoverished teen-aged boy in 1956 New York must find some way to escape and see the world.

Genre
Draft #1
Genre: Family,Drama,Thriller
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A man journeys through the genres of his life as he discovers the reason for his existence.

Legacy
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Genre: Action/Adventure,History
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A Spanish Don is sent to eighteenth-century San Antonio to construct the Missions. He must overcome the wilderness and Comanche to reunite with his fiancee and establish his family's legacy.

Three Flags over Santa Gertrudis
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Genre: Action/Adventure,Drama,History
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A wealthy Spanish family fights to preserve Spain then supports an independent Mexico and finally defeats Santa Anna at San Jacinto in order to protect their lands, property and legacy.

Appalachian Ghosts
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Genre: Thriller,Horror,Romance
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A forty-nine year old man from England moves into his fiancée's house in the Appalachians. His sinister plan is threatened when he encounters the ghosts of her dead relatives.

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