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D Scott Mangione

Establishing Shot
Favorite Genres:
To write: Family sagas
Historical fiction
Westerns. To watch: Hard science fiction

I retired from teaching {mainly 6th-grade life science) when the time was right to finally pursue my passion. I learned the format from youtube videos then wrote my first screenplay. I was accepted into a 6-month one-on-one mentorship with Scott Myers who wrote K-9 and many others. I am now working on my 7th feature screenplay. It has been nearly impossible to get anything read so I was excited to come across this site. I will do my best to give beneficial reviews. My main goal now is to get a positive referral to a manager that leads to representation. I am ready for that and I think this site may be my best chance to make that happen.


Reviewer Rating: N/A
Scripts: 6
Reviews: 3

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D Scott Mangione uploaded a script.
4 days ago
Genre feature
Genre: Family,Drama,Thriller
Logline: A man journeys through the genres of his life as he discovers the reason for his existence.
D Scott
Can someone please give a first 15 review. Thank you.
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D Scott Mangione completed a review for
1 week ago
McCracken feature
Genre: Crime,Drama
Review Rating:

When I read a script straight through with ease, I know I’m reading one that has potential. I read your script straight through and I enjoyed it. The ideas you have for this type of movie are quite good. It is a great story of what power can do to a man. The main theme is similar to the theme in “Scarface”. Your movie makes “Scarface” look like a PG movie shown at the Saturday Matinee. I feel that your portrayal of the mostly hidden world of crime syndicates is more accurate. Though that world may seem unbelievable, it does exist. In my opinion, with work on some technical things, McCracken could be a very good movie. Your story structure was very good. I felt that the major plot points hit at the appropriate times and in an easy to follow order. The B story with McCracken and his wife was well done. Your characters were mostly good reliable tropes. It is apparent that you see the complete movie in your head as you’re writing the screenplay. You do well on the most important things, story, structure, theme, major plot points, and, timing. I’m assuming this is a spec script that you would like to get produced. There are technical mistakes throughout the script that will assure it ends up in the reject pile. A screenplay is more than a story, it is the blueprint for making the movie. It has its own specific language to communicate the ideas. I hope I can help you get your second draft up to industry standards because the script is worthy of an option offer.

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1 week ago
McCracken feature
Genre: Crime,Drama
Logline: A gangster finds himself in a struggle for power against loyalists to his former boss.
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2 weeks ago
Caught in Katonah feature
Genre: Drama
Logline: Trapped in his hometown because he has to support his family, an impoverished teen-aged boy in 1956 New York must find some way to escape and see the world.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a script.
2 weeks ago
Caught in Katonah feature
Genre: Drama
Logline: Trapped in his hometown because he has to support his family, an impoverished teen-aged boy in 1956 New York must find some way to escape and see the world.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a script.
1 year ago
Silence of the Land feature
Genre: History,Romance,Western
Logline: In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos and he must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a script.
1 year ago
Silence of the Land feature
Genre: Western,History,Romance
Logline: In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos. He must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a script.
1 year ago
Thoughts feature
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
Logline: Three strangers find themselves in a mysterious place surrounded by darkness. They attempt to determine why they are there only to discover a terrifying truth.
D Scott Mangione completed a review for
1 year ago
Bop short
Genre: Comedy
Review Rating:

The concept of this screenplay is creative and original. The juxtaposition of an inflatable bop clown into the role of the discovered up-and-comer makes for a nice comedy. A universe where there is nothing unusual about an inflatable toy standing in the ring with a human boxer opens up a wide array of possibilities. It was an easy read and kept me "turning the pages". The first few pages set up the situation well and were engaging. The script begins with what seems to be the inciting incident: Bruce meeting Bop. It is not clear exactly how this moment changes everything because nothing is known about the protagonist. Showing what things were like before the incident helps the reader to relate to the character. Scenes are well-written. They don't start or end too early or late. They were not too short or long. The scene descriptions were the strongest part of the script. They allow the reader to visualize the environment. The introduction to the protagonist is abrupt. Not much is given that allows the reader to empathize with the main character. A couple of pages focusing on what the "normal life" of the protagonist is like and what his goals are before meeting Bop (inciting incident) would make Bruce a more compelling character. The dialogue is done well but is in need of more conversational language: going to = gonna, want to = wanna. The concept makes it difficult to have a high level of conflict in the scenes between Bop and Bruce but you manage to show it through Bruce's words and actions. The pacing was great. No extraneous scenes. Each scene flowed in a logical order and brought a sense of expectation of what will happen next. Very good overall structure. The transitions between acts moved the story forward. The climax is not as strong as it could be which stems from the fact that the stakes were not clearly defined. If Bruce fails how bad will things get or if he succeeds what is the reward? This also affects the character arch of the protagonist. How has Bruce changed by the end of the story. There were some formatting issues. The (con'd) should not be included. It should be quite easy to get your writing program to stop adding them. Any (more)s in the dialogue should be eliminated by keeping a character's dialogue on one page.

D Scott Mangione just claimed a review for a script.
1 year ago
Bop short
Genre: Comedy
Logline: A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.

Scripts

Christmas Cards
Draft #1
Genre: Family
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When his father is rendered unable to work, an imaginative young boy sets out to sell Christmas cards to raise money and help his poor family celebrate the holidays.

Thoughts
Draft #1
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
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Three strangers find themselves in a mysterious place surrounded by darkness. They attempt to determine why they are there only to discover a terrifying truth.

Silence of the Land
Draft #1
Genre: History,Romance,Western
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In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos and he must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.

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Caught in Katonah
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Genre: Drama
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Trapped in his hometown because he has to support his family, an impoverished teen-aged boy in 1956 New York must find some way to escape and see the world.

Genre
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Genre: Family,Drama,Thriller
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A man journeys through the genres of his life as he discovers the reason for his existence.

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