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A sequel Firefly episode

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0 Reviews | 43 pages | 3 years ago | Draft 2
Common sense says that only people reasonably familiar with the series should review this. However, the first feedback I received is almost nothing but the reviewer's own thoughts on where he saw the Firefly stories/relationships going. Essentially, critiquing my script by telling me how he would have written it. Obviously, that isn't helpful.



This takes place some indeterminate time after the events of Serenity. I know nothing about any of the subsequent novels, graphic or otherwise. Admittedly, there is some on-the-nose fan service.

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I am a HUGE Firefly fan. Have been since it first aired. I was stationed in Okinawa-Japan and Armed Forces Network .... sorry. I digress. Thank you for sparking a memory lane for a cult favorite syfy show. You have the right tropes, syntax of dialogue, and came close to the interactions among the crew. There were a couple of out-of-place moments. Inara and Zoe break into prison to break Mal and Jayne out. Inara would be reluctant to have a weapon...
The most standout aspect of the script is its loyalty to the series itself. This is an absolute must for a spec script, and "Firefly" is even more distinct than most TV shows, so there is more of a challenge here. There aren't many technical errors, but a tightening up of the action descriptions wouldn't hurt, if you were to consider rewriting in any way.

The climax is very action-packed, and something fans would genuinely appreciate as much a...
This is clearly a very professional script, I'm not entirely sure what I can recommend fixing, but I can certainly tell you everything I liked about your story.

-I really liked the introduction and how you gradually pulled back the layers of the story. In the opening scene, I thought this was going to be some sort of nautical story, then I realized we we're in outer space, then there was a prison riot, then there was an opposing government, t...

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