Awards
Approved
Nominee Draft #2
Summary
4 Reviews |
91 pages |
1 year ago
|
Draft 2
In 1998 Mike and his best friend Sherm have suspicions that their regular customer Pastor Paul is stealing money from a kid's charity and keeping it in a storage unit at Space Place where they work.
Should they steal it? Is there even money in there? Find out in the exciting heist comedy Cache!
Should they steal it? Is there even money in there? Find out in the exciting heist comedy Cache!
Industry Reviews
No Industry Reviews
Peer Reviews
I would mainly focus on the actual story, as original concepts aren't everything, but you can always make new ways to change your account. The issues I addressed in that section were minor and could be fixed quickly. Play around with the story and try all the different ideas to see what you like. The dynamic in the story was entertaining and had some great funny moments. It played out like an offbeat comedy. Great job on the script, and best of l...
Top Reviewer
Great read and would be the type of film that I could watch every day if the filmmaking lived up to the screenplay. Feels like a 90s Coen brothers movie or the best version of a Kevin Smith movie, like if The Big Lebowski was about a heist or Clerks was a caper comedy. I do think there could be more development with Mike deciding not to drink anymore it kinda just happens but kicking alcohol isn't that easy, and I think that Mike and Tara should...
Top Reviewer
For the most part, this script was perfect. Not a lot of constructive feedback. I would flesh out Tara, and make the heist less predictable. Other than that I don't think you need to change anything.
Top Reviewer
Interesting story with unexpected twists and excellent characterization. However, I would have liked to see a little more comedy. Since this is low-budget with minimal locations, it will likely be in demand. It was an interesting enjoyable read.
Top Reviewer
