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Scripts: 44
Reviews: 19

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8 months ago

short

Genre: Crime,Drama
Logline: A rookie cop on his first case faces the murder suspect in a stand-off.

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8 months ago

short

Genre: Crime,Drama
Logline: A rookie cop on his first case faces the murder suspect in a stand-off.

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8 months ago

short

Genre: Crime,Drama
Logline: A rookie cop on his first case faces the murder suspect in a stand-off.

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1 year ago

short

Genre: Action/Adventure,Crime,Drama
Logline: A police officer confronts a murder suspect, a fellow ex-Army Ranger, and must decide between his oath to uphold the law and loyalty to his brothers in arms.

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1 year ago

feature

Genre: Thriller,Action/Adventure,Drama
Logline: While on the lam in 1935 and hiding in a remote village, two mafia hit-men encounter a foe they can’t kill.

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1 year ago

short

Genre: Action/Adventure,Crime,Drama
Logline: A police officer confronts a murder suspect, a fellow ex-Army Ranger, and must decide between his oath to uphold the law and loyalty to his brothers in arms.

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1 year ago

short

Genre: Action/Adventure,Crime,Drama
Logline: A police officer confronts a murder suspect, a fellow ex-Army Ranger, and must decide between his oath to uphold the law and loyalty to his brothers in arms.

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D Ray Van uploaded a script.

1 year ago

short

Genre: Crime,Drama
Logline: A police officer confronts a murder suspect, a fellow ex-Army Ranger, and he must decide between his oath to uphold the law and loyalty to his brothers in arms.

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D Ray Van uploaded a script.

1 year ago

feature

Genre: Thriller,Action/Adventure,Drama
Logline: While on the lam in 1935 and hiding in a remote village, two mafia hit-men encounter a foe they can’t kill.

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1 year ago

short

Genre: Thriller,Drama
Logline: Two mafia hit-men, on the lam in 1935, hide out in a remote Nicaraguan village and encounter an enemy they can't kill.

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After reading your script several times, I can’t say that I fully grasp the story you’re trying to tell. Others may, but I couldn't.

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I often wondered how AGT or BGT contestants felt and might react when rejected. This script is a contestant's worst possible "HORROR"-ible reaction.

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A delightful little script full of fantasy, quests, and spirits; however, the plotline is confusing in parts, and the script is riddled with formatting issues.

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Romance

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This well-crafted script rings true for far too many families dealing with dementia.

Mystery/Suspense

Thriller

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An intriguing little Thriller Script that, unfortunately, is riddled with plot issues and on-the-nose dialogue.

Drama

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A rough-cut gem that is riddled with punctuation, spelling, missing words, and formatting errors that detracted from its impact.

Comedy

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With the script being so short, opportunities were misses to delve deeper into the lives of the main characters, their condition, and how 50's technology can be life-threatening in the 21st century.

Horror

Thriller

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Cult murders and mayhem abound in this fast-paced, action-packed thriller.

History

Thriller

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When Martin Luther, a German monk, nailed his “95 Theses” to a church door, he started the Protestant Reformation. The Roman Catholic Church took exception, charged Luther with heresy, and excommunicated him.

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A misfit engineer creates a device that opens a portal into a horror movie’s world so he and his friend can enter and alter its ending.

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A nefarious character holds world hostage unless MI-6 surrenders James Bond.

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2. Man-creature battles the dark goddess and her minions to save his wife, his family, and his people in this magic-filled epic tale of good vs. evil.

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Abducted young man wakes up to discover that he and others must fight, Gladiator style, to remain alive.

Comedy

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Two twenty-somethings come to grips with unusual marriage plans.

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A 1944 time-travel experiment sets the stage for a 2165 society ruled by Nazis who escaped into the future.

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To a ghost-hunter’s horror, his chance encounter with a mysterious statue in a closed haunted park becomes the meeting of a lifetime.

Horror

Drama

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Was a twin’s death a suicide? There are reasons to believe a past haunting holds the key to this mystery, and the surviving twin must find answers before her daughter suffers a similar fate.

Drama

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Young man, obsessed with chasing-the-dream, loses everything and attempts to help his friend, who is suspected of being the developer of the NightStalker cyber-virus that disrupts life-support system, drains bank accounts, and shuts-down computer systems.

Crime

Sci-Fi/Fantasy

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A ghost hunter, a 3:07 reset, and then, money galore

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