The Devil Knocks at Night short
#Horror
By
Rakin
Islam
A paranormal investigator gets more than he bargained for after encountering a mysterious statue in an abandoned haunted theme park.
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Summary
2 Reviews |
42 pages |
5 years ago
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Draft 3
Wilfred Jones has an online channel where he regularly records and posts videos of himself exploring haunted landmarks. His latest video is of an excursion to the local Grim Spirit Park, a once popular but currently abandoned haunted theme park. He finds himself particularly interested in the string of bizarre incidents woven throughout the park’s history which has claimed the lives of six people. Wilfred also discovers a new evil, a mysterious entity that threatens to change his life forever.
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Firstly, it was pretty creepy reading it. Can't go wrong with a guy alone in a forest at night with abandoned buildings around him.
The script felt like I was reading two different stories. One was about the old lady, Miss Gretchen, and the other being about the statue and didn't know if or why they were connected. If there was a connection then that needs to be brought to light. Also, the rules of the statue and what it actually was didn't m...
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DOES THE SCRIPT SET THE SCENE?
Yes – However, initially, I’d like to see a timeframe of your story.
Here’s why:
--Technology mix – Camcorder, computer, and Internet mixed with film camera and self-developing. Is this a transitional time period? With the advancement of digital (with infrared) and free image processing software, why would Wilfred still be using film? Cost? Other reason?
DOES THE SCRIPT INTRODUCE CHARACTERS?
Yes
--Wilford (...
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First off, I have to make a declaration and apologise. I forgot I had picked this up in order to soak up a wet afternoon and I've let it languish until such time as there's less than 2 hours left on the clock. What I'm saying is, I'm sorry this review is perhaps not as full and complete as I might have liked, but I'm kinda reading as I review. Again, my most profound apologies.
The logline drew me straight in. I'm a sucker for trope-y horror f...
The story and this writer are both incredibly charming and have a wonderful understanding of what “Spooky” is. But I can’t say this script is anything but REALLY corny.
I would say that’s fantastic, because “spooky/corny” is something that you don’t see too often in the horror genre (and what a refreshing idea, having FUN with horror).
I WOULD say that, but unfortunately I feel as though that’s not what the writer was aiming for.
If I were to...
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