Christine Locker

Christine L.

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17
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8

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The Farmers

The Farmers Draft #1 short

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An elderly couple confront unresolved rivalry when they receive a visit from an estranged family member.
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The Mourning After

The Mourning After Draft #1 short

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A young mom and a carefree petrol head both suffer with personal defeat after severe losses resulting from the same tragic incident.
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Love for Christmas

Love for Christmas Draft #1 short

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When Santa Claus loses his Christmas spirit, he receives some loving assistance from Cupid.
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Cutting Edge

Cutting Edge Draft #1 short

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When an inebriated self-proclaimed hero saves a woman on the edge, her response is not what he expects.
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Wrong Directions

Wrong Directions Draft #1 short

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An elderly couple endanger themselves by refusing to update their technology.
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Reviews
8:58
Anguish
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Roses of Venom
Singular - "Abs0lute Zer0"
Following
Activity
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Wrong Directions short
Genre: Comedy,Drama
An elderly couple endanger themselves by refusing to update their technology.
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Cutting Edge short
Genre: Drama
When an inebriated self-proclaimed hero saves a woman on the edge, her response is not what he expects.
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Love for Christmas short
Genre: Animation
When Santa Claus loses his Christmas spirit, he receives some loving assistance from Cupid.
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The Mourning After short
Genre: Drama
A young mom and a carefree petrol head both suffer with personal defeat after severe losses resulting from the same tragic incident.
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The Farmers short
Genre: Drama,Horror
An elderly couple confront unresolved rivalry when they receive a visit from an estranged family member.
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Christine Locker 5 years ago

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8:58 short
Genre: Crime,Drama
Rating: 33%
In the first paragraph you describe a lot of things about where they are going, who gave them the assignment and such. You need to find ways to "show" this instead of writing the information. If this were to be filmed, a viewer would not have that information. Quentin and Martin sit in the parking lot waiting for the clock to turn to 8:58 so they can enter the museum and steal Scream. QUENTIN Now, Roman told us to wait until 8:58 This is redundant. QUENTIN Yeah. In 9th grade. You've already mentioned 9th grade in a previous line of dialogue. QUENTIN What is a fucking movie? I don't fully understand this. Your writing is pretty good and you have a story to tell. I think the most important this is to have something to hook your writers. Why should we care about these characters? What do they have to lose if they don't complete their task. You need to look at the formatting of your script. It looks like you've centered your dialogue. There are a number of free applications you can use for writing screenplays, like Trelby. There's a specific reason why you need your script properly formatted, as it will then work out to 1 page being 1 minute in film. I do think you had a good twist at the end, but it seems like he just shot. You may need to setup that up better so that it's more apparent that it was accidental. Great job on finishing a short script. Keep writing.
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8:58 short
Genre: Crime,Drama
2 Best friends take on a heist mission.
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Anguish short
Genre: Drama
Rating: 33%
It's very difficult to review this as it is not really a screenplay. You may want to try some free apps to write with, ex Trelby. I can get a bit of characterization as Edgar seems willing to do anything if the price is right. Shawn does not like to get his hands dirty when it comes to murder or scaring people but in general he is not a reliable guy as he pretends he never made a deal with Edgar. You have a lot of conflict which is good. This seems to be more of an excerpt of a bigger story than a complete short story that can stand on its own. As it is, neither of your characters are very likeable, or at least relatable. I'd suggest that you give them more depth so that the reader/viewer is hooked and invested in the story to want to keep reading. I hope that my review is somehow helpful. Keep writing.
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Anguish short
Genre: Drama
after killing an old friend Edgar is broken over the death of his sister and will find the man responsible
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Cutting Edge short
Genre: Drama
When an inebriated self-proclaimed hero saves a woman on the edge, her response is not what he expects.