I ran out of time to do a full read of the script. Try adding more time for reviews.
1) You dialog is unrealistic. I do not read scripts, I put them in a text to speech program and listen to the script. You need to do the same. Close you eyes and hear the voices. Do they sound different? Is everyone using the same words? Are you putting in exposition instead of dialog?
2) You have people going into someone back yard and trying to start a r...
Through the eyes of a young veteran, the movie recalls the dramatic events that lead to the born of the Italian Agrarian Fascism between 1919 and 1922.
A FBI officer takes upon a homicide case unofficially when he finds it similar to his late wife's homicide meanwhile a young lady cop investigates a recent bomb explosion
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