Is the Concept strong/original? No. A daughter who is taking over her fathers legacy. Not that unusual.
Does the logline/first ten pages draw the reader? They are fine.
Are scenes well-written? Yes and no. it is very hard to match dialog to Action. What I'm talking about is the description of the fathers action may take longer or shorter than the narrator. Not until the introduction of CLEMENTINE FLOWERS does the (V.O.) stops. Having ARIA...
A beautiful young black agent must rescue her kidnapped father with the aid of a most unlikely ally, an old redneck ex cop, living next door, and prove to all she is a world class super spy.
In the wake of his father's death, a teenager named Anthony along with his best friend Derek have to figure out why aliens are invading earth and killing people.
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