Red short

No idea what to say, just too short to understand why this all happened. try to add character development before and during the scene... Trying to find a way to not sound like a dumb movie critic here, but it seems that this is how I feel reading this. so short, how can I give 150 word feedback? Find a way to expand the story, cause right now it's blatantly obviously lazy. NO idea what to say? please write a second draft and if it's long enough,...