D.A.S.:DOMESTIC ASSASSINATION SQUAD feature
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A new recruit to a secret government agency becomes embroiled in a plot to destroy the agency from within.
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90 pages |
2 years ago
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Draft 1
When a reluctant recruit to an assassination squad is given the assignment to kill one of the agency's senior assassin, he quickly realizes that he can't tell the good guys from the bad guys--- or which one he is.
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So yeah, the script is fine, all that's really holding it back is the relationship between Casper and Jon. Work on making their partner up more believable and with a bit of buildup. Other than that, the script is pretty good, the dialogue is natural, the formatting is acceptable and most of the character arcs work well.
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