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Valentin Aleksandrov

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Scripts: 2
Reviews: 10

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Valentin Aleksandrov just claimed a review for a script.
2 months ago
Cartwheels feature
Genre: Drama
Logline: When struggling single mother has her baby abducted, she teams up with another woman to figure out how to get their children back from an illegal adoption ring.
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2 months ago
SVF: Reborn (First Draft) feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Horror,Thriller
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Ok, my comment would be filled more with suggestions rather that critics because there were just a few things that I consider I should point out as a mistake or bad decision. Starting with the characters and more specifically the dialogues- all in all good but the fact the many of the characters use so much "fuck/fucking" makes them way too similar to each other. One of the rules of screenwriting is that no character should speak like another character and here that rule is broken. At least in my eyes. Leave it for just one of the characters because you create similarity between them even though it's unintentional. Leave the scenes on a cliffhanger and come back much later. The perfect example for this would be when Satan and the other 2 were dealing with Exile when he Satan was introducing it to them and that he has a plan about him, then we went for just a few minutes in Veronica's house and then right back to Satan revealing what is about to happen. Slow the pace down at that point to create mystery about what is to happen. Instead of sending Victor and Jacob back to Satan after Veronica's house scene, show us what Jacob and Victor are doing, thus avoiding giving the info about Satan's plan straightaway. Another idea that came up to me while reading- it might go like this- Victor decided to attack SVF but gets defeated and in his anger decides to seek help from Satan which(this is another detail) has a cursed axe in his head which keeps him dead only while it's in his head. This way you'll add to the build-up of the story and you will show how Satan got out alive instead of just leaving him dead in the beggining and then out of a sudden he comes back. Maybe the story lacks a bit of emotion that would cause the reader to like the characters more- I am excluding the conversation between Veronica and SVF in her house where they talked about themselves and it got a bit emotional. I think the story need a little bit more emotion and less violence, that is the best way for me to say it. Describing violent scenes takes too much of your space in the script. This can be filled with meaningful dialogues that would appeal to the reader/watcher more! Good luck, buddy!

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2 months ago
SVF: Reborn (First Draft) feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Horror,Thriller
Logline: Slaying demons and kicking ass are his specialty.
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Turn off the lights television
Genre: Comedy
Logline: The everyday struggles of a man with an extremely rare disease- fear of light.
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Turn off the lights television
Genre: Comedy
Logline: The everyday struggles of a man with an extremely rare disease- fear of light.
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2 months ago
Turn off the lights television
Genre: Comedy
Logline: The everyday struggles of a man with an extremely rare disease- fear of light.
Valentin Aleksandrov just claimed a review for a script.
3 months ago
Lollipop feature
Genre: Crime,Thriller,Action/Adventure
Logline: In 1958, a small town sharp-shooter becomes the third in a trio of female robbers, led by a violent, unpredictable psychopath, to pursue a foreseeable fortune along their road trip of crime and destruction.
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3 months ago
Hit Like a Girl short
Genre: Drama,Action/Adventure
Logline: A female martial arts instructor takes on a suicidal teenager as a student.

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Turn off the lights
Draft #2
Genre: Comedy
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The everyday struggles of a man with an extremely rare disease- fear of light.

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