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Valentin Aleksandrov

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Valentin Aleksandrov just claimed a review for a script.
5 days ago
Lollipop feature
Genre: Crime,Thriller,Action/Adventure
Logline: In 1958, a small town sharp-shooter becomes the third in a trio of female robbers, led by a violent, unpredictable psychopath, to pursue a foreseeable fortune along their road trip of crime and destruction.
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1 week ago
Hit Like a Girl short
Genre: Drama,Action/Adventure
Logline: A female martial arts instructor takes on a suicidal teenager as a student.
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1 week ago
SVF: Reborn (First 15) short
Genre: Action/Adventure,Horror,Thriller
Logline: Slaying demons and kicking ass are his specialty.
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1 week ago
Mad Talent short
Genre: Comedy,Horror
Logline: A schizophrenic man loses his sanity after his singing audition for a talent show goes wrong.
Valentin Aleksandrov completed a review for
1 week ago
Hammer Hero (Third Draft) television
Genre: Animation,Action/Adventure,Comedy
Review Rating:

We've all watched superhero movies. Most of them having one person having to save the world and most of them are too similar to be called original. Yours, however, is something else. Easy to follow, great characters, in the sense that they have their original traits, the build up from one moment to another is greatly done. The good thing is that you have 5 champions each of which could give him own storyline in every episode which will make it far from boring to watch. Having a different character as main every episode. However, I wasn't imagining it as an animation. Definitely not. At least for me. Sure it could resemble many animation/anime series but still I see it more as being done with real people. In my head popped the idea of them having to go through obstacles before they are ready to fight. Something to prepare them in the upcoming 2-3 episodes. That's up to you but that's how I see the things going. As I said it was fun to read. Maybe they had spent too much time in that temple. In my eyes. Usually in series nothing goes too good for too long. In a normal series they would've been interrupted by a monster long before the ceremony had been finished which brings me to the idea that they can actually be attacked by blight in the temple itself. I just felt there was too much time without tension going on. There was just those dialogues between the Goddess and the champions. This doesn't mean that it's bad but rather that it could definitely be improved. The description were good and easy to imagine. Great work!

Valentin Aleksandrov just claimed a review for a script.
1 week ago
Hammer Hero (Third Draft) television
Genre: Animation,Action/Adventure,Comedy
Logline: When the chosen champion of humanity mouths off to the Goddess, he's replaced by his unqualified and underprepared step-brother.
Valentin Aleksandrov completed a review for
1 week ago
Rooted television
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:

Well, I don't think I've across the word "weed" in my life more than I had while reading this script. For real. It was too much, literally too much. I don't remember a page without coming across this and having this as something that is in the centre of your story ruins it totally in every aspect in my eyes. It's perfectly fine to have it mentioned from time to time but not a movie about drugs. This won't be a box office hit, in my opinion. Put more emphasis on Eli aside from his friends and give him some time with Penny. Show some of their story, how they met, what happened, what led to this moment from the beggining. Some flashbacks never hurt and give more sense to the relations between the characters from the story. It gives life to them. Another thing that is easy to notice is how similar are the characters to each other simply because all of them talk about weed. (well almost all of them). Sometimes I even had to read the same page twice to realize who's who because I got confused in the process. Every character should have unique traits and speak differently from the others. Generic characters, like teens with drug addiction won't make it far. Change your characters and bring more sense to the story. The script itself is not engaging. It doesn't give you a reason to want to know what happens next. It has to have either something thrilling in it or a romance between the main character and someone else in order to make it interesting because the way you wrote it is simply- from school to Jimmy's house, to Liam's house, to Jess' house and so on. Bring a new element. Something worth and bring it early in the script to create interest. It could be transformed into something big but needs A LOT of work.