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Lottery Logix by Kathleen Hof

#Drama

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Interesting concept and ambitious storytelling, while it shows us the struggle of 4 brothers make there way from rags to riches through their algorithm/app. I think the overall still needs work but the concept is very interesting.

Cyberghost Pilot by i n

#Drama #Sci-Fi/Fantasy

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It was an interesting read with an unique concept but one that should be expanded on with more pages. Despite that it really builds on our interest of what can come next.

Medium: Pilot by i n

#Drama #Mystery/Suspense

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Overall it was well paced and involved an interesting narrative that revolves around the protagonist's mental health. I enjoyed it and really rooted for her all throughout.

Hawk and Dove E01 "In The Beginning" by James Odulaja

#Action/Adventure #Crime

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Overall I enjoyed the read and thought its a good orgin story for the characters Hawk and Dove. Some small typo issues but the story definlty grips you and keeps you engaged so good work all around.

Pokémon: Poke Cup by Chris Welsh

#Family #Sci-Fi/Fantasy

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Overall I think its an interesting look into the world of Pokémon and resolves in a way to create intrigue and potential for more story and has interesting character growth.

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Manuel Trujillo 1 year ago

uploaded a script.

Warrior Society television

Genre: Action/Adventure,Thriller,Crime
When a man loses everything in an unfortunte turn of events, he struggles to regain his life while being homeless until an old friend gives him a lifeline into perusing a career in professional boxing.

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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IN PLAIN SIGHT feature

Genre: Action/Adventure,Comedy
A Private Investigator-turned-CIA asset must take the reins on an investigation when the agent in charge becomes an amnesiac so that they can free the agent's captive daughter and stop a worldwide banking catastrophe that could lead to WWIII

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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Lottery Logix feature

Genre: Drama

Rating: 40%

Overall It was an interesting read. But had several errors in logic throughout you had some great descriptions when you showed the homeless area as it was very realistic. I thought the story has lots of potentials as the concept is very interesting and has a strong theme of helping others and solving the poverty problem. I do warn that it has moments where I scratch my head and think "well that didn't make sense" don't worry though since there's nothing a good revision can't fix. overall good work!

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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Lottery Logix feature

Genre: Drama
When four homeless math genius brothers create a lottery winning app that funds their plan to eradicate homelessness, they must overcome debilitating mental health issues and battle ruthless politicians in money losing states intent on illegally shutting them down. Inspired by the real app.

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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Cyberghost Pilot television

Genre: Drama,Sci-Fi/Fantasy

Rating: 47%

I think that this story has potential and can grow into something really good, Although you should probably make it longer say 50-65 pages. Seeing as its a drama (serious show) and not a sitcom. I would really recommend you rethink how you wanna integrate the AI TECH into this story as right now it lacks a bit of logic. mainly in how they want to get there mom out with it. And how does the cyber ghost actual jump into the real world since he's able to cut Ramones hand. I would flesh that out in the next pages instead of ending at page thirty. Overall I enjoyed the concept and am interested in where you wish to take it. Good work and keep at it :)

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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Cyberghost Pilot television

Genre: Drama,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
A guy has to take commands from a possessed computer.

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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Medium: Pilot television

Genre: Drama,Mystery/Suspense

Rating: 73%

Overall I thought the story was unique and intertaining. I enjoyed it thoughout. I just wonder if this is a drama then shouldnt it be longer? like 50- 60 pgs? As this story is not a sitcom maybe you can flesh it out more and write a longer story arc that leads to her getting out of the hosptial and facing Kyle. However, if you decide to go with it I really think you should continue the story to a later point. That being said I think the script ends with an interesting clift hanger so it not so bad as is, just that I think you definilty go further with this script so it can end at the proper length between 50-60pgs.

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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Medium: Pilot television

Genre: Drama,Mystery/Suspense
A girl who experiences supernatural entities also has to battle a psychological disorder.

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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Hawk and Dove E01 "In The Beginning" television

Genre: Action/Adventure,Crime

Rating: 67%

I think that this was a good script that captivated me with the theme and story arc. It intrigued me with where it will go after this and that's definitely a good thing. Just try to make it more concise like I said as that's rather important. 50-70 pgs max. I think you should just revise a bit more in spelling and typos as well since that is important if your gonna give this to an agent and would want to get it made. One last is that I noticed there is no title page. very small detail but rather important to have in a script so I suggest adding the title page Otherwise good work as I enjoyed it and keep at it cus this story has got potential. :)

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Manuel Trujillo 2 years ago

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Hawk and Dove E01 "In The Beginning" television

Genre: Action/Adventure,Crime
Through the trials and sorrows of their past, Hank and Don are united by destiny and become Hawk and Dove to fight crime.

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