Pri Cha

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Pri Cha 3 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Put The Gun Down cover image
Put The Gun Down short
Genre: Crime,Drama
A rookie cop on his first case faces the murder suspect in a stand-off.
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Pri Cha 3 years ago

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Perform: Center Stage (First 15) cover image
Perform: Center Stage (First 15) short
Genre: Drama,Horror,Thriller
Rating: 80%
Good concept and plot. The Overstudy scenes are well written. The therapy session scene needs to be improved. The Overstudy was clearly uncomfortable with Hank going on therapy sessions but I didn't find anything great about the session in the scene. She didn't take any action but just asked him to keep attending the sessions. Shouldn't she be a great impact on the story? Scene of the Overstudy hurting both Carrie and Eleanor can be improved. Both Overstudy and Carrie are strong characters. Hank is a bit lousy. He felt a bit off sometimes. The dialogues felt lousy at times. He explains too much at one go. It will be more interesting if things unravel a little slower. Dr. Herriet's character can be improved as well. Flow of the story is more good. Clarity can be much better. There is confusion regarding who The Overstudy has grudge against, Carrie or Eleanor. He said he would kill Carrie but attacked Eleanor. Describe the characters. How do the characters look? The character can't be visualized at all. Change the climax. Just them having soda? Dropped my enthusiasm totally. The storyline is creative. I suggest you read more psychological crime thrillers. That would be of great help. Best of luck!
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Pri Cha 3 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Perform: Center Stage (First 15) cover image
Perform: Center Stage (First 15) short
Genre: Drama,Horror,Thriller
Hope you liked the first act, because now it's time for the grand finale!
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Pri Cha 3 years ago

just joined ScriptMother!