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Police Search (opening scene) by Marlon Schwiersch

#Crime #Thriller #Horror

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A first scene that, although dynamic, offers nothing new

DOLOR by Nikolay Romanov

#Drama

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A confusing and undeveloped script with a potentially promising hook

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Giovanni Santalucia 4 months ago

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Police Search (opening scene) short

Genre: Crime,Thriller,Horror

Rating: 33%

It is difficult to judge this scene in certain respects because it is only one scene in a script, but the main piece of feedback I have is to make sure that the unique profiles of your characters and the singularity of your broader narrative color every action, interaction, and piece of dialogue. This scene is an action-packed hook, but it doesn't give us specific insight into the story or the characters.

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Giovanni Santalucia 4 months ago

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Police Search (opening scene) short

Genre: Crime,Thriller,Horror
A police search of a car stopped on the side of the road goes horribly wrong...

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Giovanni Santalucia 4 months ago

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DOLOR short

Genre: Drama

Rating: 7%

Overall, this reads as a vague idea rather than a script. You need to delineate what is going on, especially since this story seems to be set in a fantasy/sci-fi world (a world that requires building and explanation). You also need to give your characters a backstory. What motivates them? Why do they do what they do? Show this in their dialogue.

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Giovanni Santalucia 4 months ago

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DOLOR short

Genre: Drama
After facing the brutal violence of this world, a man survives to live.

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Giovanni Santalucia 4 months ago

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