Overall, this reads as a vague idea rather than a script. You need to delineate what is going on, especially since this story seems to be set in a fantasy/sci-fi world (a world that requires building and explanation). You also need to give your characters a backstory. What motivates them? Why do they do what they do? Show this in their dialogue.
A burned‑out 58‑year‑old screenwriter, Matthew Rivera, is ready to give up on his dreams—until a young filmmaker discovers him in the rain and offers an unexpected chance to bring his script to life.
In the near future, a company introduces an inventive new VR headset which enables its users to replay their memories at will. One such user is Sarah, who uses the headset to look back at the tragic events in her life.
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