Very intriguing story. I found myself really enjoying it and wanting to know more and invested in what happens next. It reminds me of Goosebumps or The Twilight Zone where it packs a whole story and extreme character depth in one short story. Really worth going forward with. I have a voice in my head very similar to the metal so I can say from personal experience that part is accurate. I feel as though the protagonist was relatable and the antagonists were believable. If I had any complaint about the story it would have to be the ending. It felt too abrupt. It would be cool if some more bystanders were killed or more stuff happened or something. It felt as though it had a nice pace and the next thing you know it’s over. Overall, I really enjoyed it and I look forward to what happens to it next.