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#Drama
By
Rafi
Gunawan
While caring for a 10-year-old orphan, an impoverished pessimist tries to keep a homeless shelter he unlawfully occupies from being demolished so the residents won't be evicted.
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93 pages |
3 years ago
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Draft 2
Rick, pessimistic, impoverished and desperate, must discover a way to keep the homeless shelter he runs from being demolished. When a 10-year-old orphan named Sky comes into his care, his perspective on what life can truly be starts to change.
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The diamond in the rough of this is the relationship between Rick, Zoe, and Sky. Everything else is kind of useless. A dramatic retelling of the inciting incident and subplots could and should be done. Rebuild the world in which they live and around their relationships. Good luck in your future drafts.
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