SVF: Epilogue (Work in Progress) feature
#Action/Adventure #Drama #Thriller
By
Cyle
Brooks
SVF must take one last stand against the man who matched him, but at what cost?
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Nominee Draft #1
Summary
6 Reviews |
15 pages |
1 year ago
|
Draft 1
After being beaten by Zombiathan, SVF is forced into retiring from being a hero. 10 years later, Zombiathan has overrun the city with his new gang and SVF must come out of retirement to put an end to his reign once and for all, but also protect his wife and son at all costs.
Contains prolonged sequences of strong brutal bloody violence and gore throughout, disturbing images, pervasive language, crude sexual content and nudity, drug use and drinking.
Contains prolonged sequences of strong brutal bloody violence and gore throughout, disturbing images, pervasive language, crude sexual content and nudity, drug use and drinking.
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It is good to see the third installment of the SVF trilogy finally in the works. With action fight scenes as well as new characters, it looks to be promising and bring and end to the trilogy. As a proof of concept work as a first fifteen pages is a good way to figure out where you are going with a script or even go in that direction.
Having SVF forced into retirement and the way it came about unusual. It felt out of character for him with no imm...
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MAIN THING: I saw that this is a series, and I know this is the epilogue part, and I have not read any previous works of the SVF series, so if this is a bit skewed sorry about that. I like the story of a man making a deal with the enemy and now facing how he chooses to protect his family. I wanted the villain of Zombiathon, and he was an excellent concept to develop. In the beginning, the fight between SVF and him sometimes felt a little repetiti...
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The story is all about kicks, punches, stabs and killing. Very little about why they’re doing those things. I don’t know what a director would need to film this story, but I’m pretty sure he/she wouldn’t need to rely on that much detail. This felt more like a novel than a script to me.
A lot of info dumps make it hard to follow. I imagine there’s much more to this story which would probably be more enlightening. That’s the problem with reading s...
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Your action sequences are super well-written - the fight choreography is clear and easy to follow, with each character's movements and reactions clearly conveyed with descriptive language and descriptive action verbs.
I'd like to learn more about the characters during the fight scenes and what the overall fight is over, what's the reason or motivation.
Additionally, it feels a little abrupt waffling between either intense fight scenes or le...
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You have some promise here, but at the end of the day the story is pretty basic superhero fare. Adding some novelty to the story would help a lot.
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