Wanna See
0

Legend of Tyson Hill - Episode 1 (Rewrite)

television
By Connor Thompson
Drama,Mystery/Suspense,Family

When Alex goes missing a mother will do all she can to find him.

Approved
Peer Rating: 47%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 2: 47%
2 Reviews | 41 pages | 1 year ago | Draft 2

Summary

Alex thought he had always had it easy from his family life to his beautiful girlfriend but that all disappears when he goes missing in the middle of the night. From that night everything will change in the town of Tyson Hill as a huge mystery will unfold dragging in everyone from the town as it becomes clear that a larger force is at work.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

Here were my thoughts on your script:

1. Concept - I liked the idea of a mother going to all ends to try and find her son after he goes missing. Although it isn't an original concept, I liked the twist you added to it.

2. Story - I liked the story you were trying to tell, however, it was hard for me to follow along with unfortunately. The different subplots don't seem to flow or connect with each other as strongly as they should, which in t...

1 year ago | read more...
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer
Notes
-The lack of slang made the dialogue feel very stiff. Everyone talks very properly the entire story, even when they're scared or upset. Adding a couple, "can'ts, don'ts, wont's, etc". Will really liven things up. I especially think you should give more slang to the younger characters, especially Jordon. I don't think that he would speak so properly. He doesn't sound like a kid.
-I enjoyed how your scene descriptions were almost like char...

1 year ago | read more...
Jonathan Barbour Top Reviewer

Recommended for You

Archangels intercede to save Treasury Agent Casey’s life as the Black Angel Syndicate are on the Agent’s and Ghost Writer’s inquiry into the financial holdings. Elle Divine and the disciples leverage net apps to proselytize their arrival through music and a resurrection.
A camera guy decides to follow the day to day life of a proud and eccentric motel manager, when a mysterious drifter rolls into town disrupting the manager's routine life.
In a chaotic world where dangerous beings no longer hide in darkness but walk amongst the living, a special group is tasked with protecting both sides.