The story seems to focus on a fling or a subverted relationship. The script has the occasional spelling and grammatical error but nothing that will pull the reader out of the script, even if the dialogue is a little bit hokey at times. I think this could work as a short half-hour film if it were developed a bit more thoroughly and the characters were given a little extra personality beyond being simple stereotypes and archetypes. Furthermore, I find the ending rather disturbing... why would the police, who have saved Alice's life (apparently), then proceed to go after her? Is it something symbolic that I'm not aware of? I think Benoit going gung-ho in the climax was a little predictable - we've seen the Overprotective Dad trope millions of times in film and television before, I was hoping for something more constructive and unique like a conversation with her supposed lover and/or harasser.

Cheese Toddler. What does it mean? Nobody knows except for our protagonist, and even he doesn't have a clear answer. This script has a very short but also somewhat heartwarming premise. I like the idea of a story told mainly in the form of montages, which essentially makes it more of an extended music video with dialogue peppered throughout as opposed to a motion picture in its own right, but that does not necessarily detract from the quality of the idea, since there is not much of a plot to go on save for the two words that make up the title. Whimsical but also metaphysical, there is potential in this script, which, with a rewrite or two, could go from a diamond in the rough to a highly polished gemstone worthy of production, and it could also work at film festivals. There isn't much dialogue, as previously stated, because sometimes less is more, but if rewritten well and shot well, then it could work to its benefit. The sole downside is that the protagonist doesn't have much of an arc or personality, which could be something to think about in future rewrites.