It's an above average script, I really appreciate the effort. Let me clear this that I am not a professional, still learning. Hence I advice you to not take the review seriously although I will try my best to point out some things. Let me start with the beginning, if I were to see your script in the form of 3 act structure, I think the inciting incident comes way too soon. The story has just started when Ansel decides to run with Modest, personally I think you should give it some time. Develop their relationship, maybe not show Garret fully evil. Give it some time, let the relationship develop before the audience can see them escape. It also feels a little rushed when you introduced the bear, though it was necessary to separate the two so we can see each character develop independently. But you could have introduced it a little late, not too much. Use that time in the jungle to elaborate more about the friendship of the Ansel and Modest. I don't now if you wrote it as an animated or motion movie but if it is animated then maybe you can add some extra features, you know breaking those real life rules and if it is motion picture then try to make it more realistic. I sincerely appreciate your effort, i found the story interesting, though the truth is that adventure films like this type has too much scope which I feel is not fully exploited. don't get me wrong, the scenes and events are good but maybe their is scope to make it more exciting. Dialogues are good, interesting but can be improved. I have to repeat this point again that story feels a little dragged out, but it got potential. I am not a very big fan of this genre so I don't know much. The pacing is proper after their separation but you can choose the events better. Character change, resolution of Ansel is too sudden, try to give that scene a time. Maureen can be a great character, you need to give her more time and make her character change ore subtle and slow. Also don't just let her tell about the emotions stuff, try to show it in the form of subtext. Modest too should have a weakness, maybe under confident or too soft and caring, highlight it and change him.
