# The concept is kind of unique. We saw a lot of power out, intruder in movies but combine this with paranoia due to smoking is unique.
Though paranoia wasn't executed clearly. All of her fears was legit and real. I wish you make her scared of dark then start imagining something unreal like flying objects in the air that suddenly dissapear. Then, she doubt her self if what she is seeing and hearing is real or not, until she makes sure someone is really at her home, and you may let her talk to her self and connect that paranoid to dope while being frightened.
# I like how tension escalate slowly through the scene starting from sounds and thunder to see an intruder in her house, especially in the kitchen after seeing the shadow on the wall, you used many ways to make it tense sound, and flames goes out. Phone battery is out, then she freeze.
# There is not much development through action and dialogue in the story. The development is depending on tension, psychologist stress, doubt, fear, reasoning and mental realization. I think you can categorize the script as psychology drama.
# I don't see much comedy in the story, only at the end when she hits her husband, it was funny, but I don't think you can categorize it as comedy.
# The charecter is clearly calm we see this when she continues smoking or holding her phone in that dark scary atmosphere. She is brave, a little bit clumsy when she goes to check the kitchen with a fire poker on her hand when the deputies clearly told her to hide. Character is well written.
# The character is clearly developing we see her relaxed and smoking, we see her frightened and trying save and defend her self, we finally see her realizing that she doesn't want to smoke. Watching her coming into that realization is satisfying.
# The idea is very clear. The story is clearly saying "don't smoke dope". I like the comedy twist and the nice atmosphere at the end. The switch from thrill to relax mood was good.
# The dialogue was natural and smart. Especially at the end when they talked about beer instead of smoking. The whole idea depended on these few words.
# Shouldn't deputies talk about the intruder call with trudy, and ask nick on private about abuse. I think that is what would police do if they suspect abuse. They talk to victims privately.
