Ah, now I remember why I haven't come back to this website... the enforced word count on the Comments field. Seriously? Forcing a 400-600 word comments section even for short film scripts that might only include 1500 words themselves? Really? Hmm, kind of makes you want to add a few filler paragraphs just to bolster your word count. Like this one for instance. Yes, I really wouldn't pay too much attention to the contents of this paragraph. In fact, I'd skip ahead if I were you. I think it's abundantly clear what this paragraph is here for. Words. Words, words, words, words, words. A whole bunch of them strung together in order to push up those numbers, so that this review can be submitted. Where are we at so far? Maybe 100 or so? Possibly even one hundred and fifty. Yes, I'd say it's round about that number. I suppose now the question becomes how many words are we aiming to fill here? And that in turn makes one wonder - how many words do we actually have as commentary. Oh Lordy, I don't know, as I haven't written the commentary yet. So why didn't I write this nonsense filler paragraph after I'd written my actual commentary? Well, now that I see what an undertaking this filler paragraph actually is, I'm starting to wonder that myself. But you know, I am in filler paragraph stepp'd in so far that, should I wade no more, returning were as tedious as go o'er. And so it continues. I guess I'm doing it this way round because I remember how much it pissed me off last time I tried to write a review and I actually lost my entire synopsis and commentary because it wouldn't let me submit, having found my word count wanting. So, you know, I'm not going through that again. Kinda stoopid, that was. So... umm... what now... Oh... hang on... Hand on a sec: Wait. Hold! No more. Perhaps this is enough. Let me just check the word count... Over 300 words of nonsense! Hurrah! Not bad. Could push through a few more sentences, but I think we're basically there.
And so... ahem... on to my actual comments.
This is a great short script! Smartly written and I did not guess the outcome - though it made perfect sense once I got there. That's exactly what you want from a story, right? A surprising but comprehensible untangling of threads. Plus the writing is clear, simple, funny and human.
I can imagine this film being made, and being a lot of fun to watch too. There's nothing unfilmable or budget-busting here. It's also got social currency - it's an idea worth talking about. I guess the core thought could possibly come across as sexist and patronising... so I think the director and actors would need to consider that carefully. But it's easily relatable enough and funny enough to swerve that potential problem.
I think the only element that slightly jars with me is Pete's character and behaviour. He's ever so flippant about his wife's craziness, but cares enough to employ an exorcist... and then, when the truth is revealed, he becomes an instant doting husband. Maybe his character arc needs a little tweaking? Perhaps he needs to care a little more upfront... or needs to stay a little more care-less throughout? This could be done by revising a few lines, or perhaps be managed through the actor's performance.
Not a single typo or grammatical error, so far as I could see. Also, the whole script was easy and speedy to read. Engaging from start to finish!
