Priya Narayanan

Priya N.

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Hello My Friend (Scoots)
Courier 12
To Win Her Back
The Show Must Go On
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Priya Narayanan 6 days ago

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Hello My Friend (Scoots) television
Genre: Comedy
Rating: 33%
This story introduces an eccentric concept and strange characters within a familiar sci-fi thriller framework. The narrative adopts a recognizable structure, featuring unique elements like Mr. Scoots and his puppets, an unexpected conflict, and a stunt sequence. The unconventional characters contribute to an intriguing unpredictability, though some, like the half-snail/half-mouse with a horn, present inherent challenges for reader imagination. The story features distinctly eccentric characters, and while some may connect with audiences, the visceral choice in the stunt sequence, using excrement as weaponry, could be polarizing. The dialogue effectively serves the story, with Lil Scoots' Groot-like lines adding humor. Other dialogue adequately reflects character personalities. However, the script could benefit from richer descriptive language to enhance world visualization. Specifically, greater clarity regarding the appearances of DickNose and VaginaLips is needed, as their features remained indistinct throughout, creating a disconnect for the reader. While the concept and character choices are bold, refining the visual descriptions and reconsidering potentially off-putting elements could significantly strengthen the pilot's impact.
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Priya Narayanan 1 week ago

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Hello My Friend (Scoots) television
Genre: Comedy
A ragtag group of unusual characters band together to stop the one true enemy, sobriety.
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Priya Narayanan 1 year ago

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Courier 12 feature
Genre: Comedy,Action/Adventure,Horror
Rating: 73%
A one of its kind story with multiple layers and a great structure. The story revolves around a bunch of Story Analysts. Theo and his colleagues are put to a task of submitting a worthy script that the Production House could work on. The story takes multiple turns in different genres and finally arrives at an absolutely unexpected ending. The backdrop is very unique. This is probably the first one about story analysts that I have read. The idea of intertwining five different stories into one is very interesting. The writer takes it one step higher by using the same people to play different characters. The writer's skill at describing the scenes, especially the action sequences, is excellent. With so less words, all the emotions are conveyed. The way each scene has been written needs special mentioning. Everything feels so unique and new and unpredictable. You can never guess whats gonna happen next. Which is a great plus! Considering the uniqueness of the script, it does get a little difficult to follow in certain places. May be the flow could be modified in the initial few pages to help the reader get a hang of the structure. The sub-stories, instead of being standalone stories themselves, could be modified into stories that convey something about the main story in some way. The ending is quite unexpected, but it does leave the reader a bit confused. May be a little modification to explain better would help. Overall, its a very unique script that aims at something extraordinary. Great writing!
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Priya Narayanan 1 year ago

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In The Beginning television
Genre: Drama,Horror,Action/Adventure
What God did before creating the world.
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Priya Narayanan 1 year ago

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Courier 12 feature
Genre: Comedy,Action/Adventure,Horror
A dejected story analyst learns what it means to use your head, follow your heart and have the courage to take a worthy risk.
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Priya Narayanan 1 year ago

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To Win Her Back short
Genre: Drama,Romance
Rating: 47%
A simple short story about the conversation between two people, Christos and Jake. Christos is trying to move on from his last relationship. Jake, being a good friend, tries to help Christos think positively. The bond between Christos and Jake is well established in the writing. The metaphorical use of the broken toy airplane is interesting. That said, the story can be improvised in multiple ways. Explaining the real reason behind Christos' breakup and why he feels so guilty might help the reader connect with his character better. Telling us how Jake and Christos became such good friends would also help. Trimming the dialogues is another thing that could be done. Trying a non-linear approach to the story might make the story more interesting. Adding a structure to the way its written might help too. A good beginning, a good middle and a good ending would make it a better read. Good luck.
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Priya Narayanan 1 year ago

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To Win Her Back short
Genre: Drama,Romance
Christos talks to his friend about getting his ex back
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Priya Narayanan 1 year ago

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The Show Must Go On feature
Genre: Drama,Horror,Thriller
Rating: 87%
This is a one of its kind script. It begins with Gabriel as a child going to a theatre to watch a unique play/punishment. It then touches upon the highlights of Gabriel's life growing up. Eventually, the story slows down and stops at the point where Gabriel and his daughter Elisabeth deal with their conflicting opinions. First of all, the idea of the play "The Entertainment" is absolutely unique. The way Gabriel meets Veronica in the bar is yet another unique scene. Full points to the writer for this. After the first few pages, the story takes a different route altogether. Scenes that convey a quick passage of almost 15 years. Choosing the most important bits to convey the relevant emotions is pretty difficult. The way those portions are handled is once again very very good. Elisabeth and Gabriel's conflicting beliefs have been showcased well. The best part is that the writer has been able to give us a story that keeps us hooked till the very end. A few suggestions. There are too many spelling mistakes. Would be great if they are looked into. Because the story spans over a period of almost 20 to 30 years, there are many questions that keep popping up. For example, Gabriel and Chrissy's fallout is not explained. The reason why Elisabeth finds "The Entertainment" entertaining as a child is not explained. Maybe adding a dialogue or two to subtly explain why a few things happened might help connect with the characters better. Overall, a very unique and promising script! Keep up the good work!
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Priya Narayanan 1 year ago

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The Show Must Go On feature
Genre: Drama,Horror,Thriller
Gabriel lives in a world where people who commit henious crimes like murder, arson, etc. are sentenced with being put in front of live audiences as the style of play before shortly being executed. Gabriel is going to see his first show and it will change the course of his life forever.
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Priya Narayanan 1 year ago

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Switch television
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Drama
Rating: 93%
A very well written story with an innovative concept. The story begins with siblings Jake and Carly. Jake is stuck with his past and is struggling to move on. He reaches a point where nothing is going his way. He decides to travel back in time to that point when he was his happiest self. Carly and Kelly, Jake's girl friend try talking him out of it but Jake is too stubborn to change his mind. Gavin, a security person at Quantumech, is going through something similar in his life. He is regretting an incident from his past and wants to go back in time to avoid it from happening. The episode ends with the chaos that erupts when Gavin and Jake "switch" at the same time. First things first. The concept is very innovative. Loved it. The description of Quantumech, how the whole "switching" works, the problems associated with this company and switching. Everything has been established very well with the writing. As a reader, I felt as if I was part of that world myself. Jake's character is well thought out. His decision of wanting to switch has been justified pretty well. Gavin's character has a good introduction. Carly and Kelly's characters are yet to be written about elaborately. With whatever little is written, it is easy to connect with them. A couple of suggestions. The starting scenes with Jake tend to drag a bit. May be they could be shortened to focus more on exploring Gavin's character. Also, Kelly seems like a very sweet person. Jake's lack of interest in her could be explained a bit more. Overall, it's a great concept with very good writing. Good luck!