Concept: The concept is excellent, you basically take "The Exorcist," and combine it with the opening scene from "Saving Private Ryan," and it is a captivating concept for a horror film. The possession and by whom was well thought out and researched, and if not, it is written to where it appears so.
Logline/First 10: The writer did an excellent job in both areas. The logline made me immediatly wanted to read the script. The first 15 pages stoked me out, it made me really want to produce the movie. Excellent imagination.
Scenes: The writer put a lot of thought into the scenes, and there is some exceptional thoughts in there that make them stand out. However, the action writing is way to long, they read like a novel. I worry about how much actual movie is there if the action scenes were written properly. They need to be condensed. If you want to direct the movie fine, but you don't write it as the director, which is what happened here.
Protagnoist/antagonist: Save these comments for later in the review; overall the reader could grasp them quickly and easily.
Dialogue: Dialogue is very poor. It doesn't develop the characters well nor explain the relationship between them. Dialogue does pace the movie well, and Tylers dialogue does have some better than average one liners for an action hero, but for the most part all dialouge is poor and needs improved upon.
Conflict: Best part of the script, orignal in a sense, well researched, easy to market, and a built in fan base.
Pacing: The pacing is about 50/50. The opening is great, then it gets a little to much at once. I would like to see some scenes slow it down and develop the characters relationships and give us just a bit more on the insight. I think if the pacing were correct there is a lot more you could do with the reverend. Having typed that though, if you the writers intent was pure chaos from opening to closing, they certainly accomplished that well.
Climax/Resolution: It was satisfying, the writer left it open like you're supposed to. As with any script there is room for improvement.
Script Read: The script maintains your interest because the concept is so good, and the writer takes some details with action and props that make it stand out. It does not read well though. The action scenes are way to long and written like a book, there are several simple grammar mistakes, such as misspellings, double words, and punctuation errors. So many in fact that it leads one to conclude the writer just didn't care to proof read at all before submitting.
