The writing is smooth and the language is well crafted. However, i believe that the script needs to find a lot more to be taken seriously. The title, t begin with is ridiculous and when we finally realise the import of it towards the climax, it turns out to be laugh out loud funny and ridiculous. I would seriously recommend reconsidering the title and the device used. Yes, it does fall in line with the 'vines and creepers' but it just not filmic enough.
Cherry needs to be further developed. There is nothing that makes me feel for her. She seems pretty normal in every way (other than her 'situation' which again has not been explored enough)) which is why when she becomes a god, it does nothing to the reader. If on the other hand, Cherry were developed to be weak, under-confident, then her becoming a god has meaning. Right now, it is besides the point. Also, her deciding to remain at the vineyard seems more a result of her sister dying and her becoming a god. It has very little to her discovering herself. (she was made a god. she did not discover a god in her. That weakens the story and character development.)
There is a plot to the script but the story is uneventful in terms of drama. The audience seems to have got nothing from the script. Further, Tony serves no real purpose in the story. The script would not change much if you leave Tony out of it. I seriously think he can be given a more purposeful presence.
Overall the script leaves me dissatisfied.
Given that the writer clearly has the talent to write and has an impressive control over the language, I would really hope to read better, more meaningful and dramatically evocative scripts in the future.
