Isaac Chiswesha

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THE TATTOO MAN Draft #1

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Two half brothers and soul heirs to the Mpezeni kingdom in central Africa who grew up from different worlds must settle their succession dispute in a boxing ring.
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BLACK CHILD Draft #1

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After falling victim and silenced by a sexual abuser, a young woman must find means to expose this powerful man or the girl children continue to being abused
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INCEST Draft #1

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After impregnating his own biological daughter, a psychosexual disordered man must find means to conceal his sexual relation or face divorce and conviction.
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IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 1 year ago

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BLACK CHILD feature
Genre: Drama
After falling victim and silenced by a sexual abuser, a young woman must find means to expose this powerful man or the girl children continue to being abused
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 1 year ago

uploaded a script.

INCEST feature
Genre: Drama
After impregnating his own biological daughter, a psychosexual disordered man must find means to conceal his sexual relation or face divorce and conviction.
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 1 year ago

just purchased a review. Claim it here

BLACK CHILD feature
Genre: Drama
After falling victim and silenced by a sexual abuser, a young woman must find means to expose this powerful man or the girl children continue to being abused
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 1 year ago

uploaded a script.

BLACK CHILD feature
Genre: Drama
After falling victim and silenced by a sexual abuser, a young woman must find means to expose this powerful man or the girl children continue to being abused
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 2 years ago

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DEMANDING VOICES feature
Genre: Mystery/Suspense
Rating: 47%
MY OVERALL FEED BACK. WHAT I DID NOT LIKE: a) DESCRIPTION - In the opener. Your told us & did not show us in some portion of your description. For example: You telling us the greystone psychiatric hospital. You tell us about how it used to be a torturing place. I think this should be ommited. Write what we can hear n see in the screenplay. Not what happened. b) CONFLICTS -The conflicts were a bit flat. Yes you set out a double conflict. His fight with his inner demons and the doctor. But I feel the conflict should have been more intense. E.g.. I expected more intense fight between Justin n the voices. For example: they are forcing him to eat the food which he believes it's poisoned. He doesn't obey their command. ( this sounds better). Now his choice not to obey the voice complicates. He is seriously thirsty and hungry. Then it complicate further when he sees a fellow patient that takes drugs on an empty stomach go in syncope. This makes him judge. Take a risk. Both directions he takes can be fatal. He eats he dies or take meds he dies. This intrigues us more and sympathize with our main characters quest to survive. c) STRUCTURE - I didn't like it. I expected the inciting incident and the major turning point but did not see any at the expected time frame. Here is how I could have done. Am not trying to change your story in any way. OPENING IMAGE: - Just like you introduced. HOOK - When Justin witnesses the murder of the patient. @ page 5-10. INCITING INCIDENT - When Justin discovers that there is a list or order on how the murders will be done FIRST MAJOR TURNING POINT - When he finds the paper and discovers that his pregnant girlfriend and him are next. Like that. WHAT I LIKED - The concept and story was okhy. - The opener - Doctor Eric's subtext dialogue and his lie OTHERS - Please get back to me on how you found my review. Contact me: +260975483789 Watsapp or email Chisweshaisaac287@gmail.com Thank you. Continue with great work
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 2 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

DEMANDING VOICES feature
Genre: Mystery/Suspense
After an insane asylum patient witnesses his revered psychiatrist murdering fellow patients, he battles the voices in his head to convince someone in the sane world he's not hallucinating before more patients are murdered, including himself and his pregnant, patient girlfriend.
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 2 years ago

completed a review for

Cowspiracy Ep 2 television
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Rating: 7%
In conclusions you need to revise your work. I fouñd that the concept was okhy. It is something that can get some audiences. However the story did not do quite well for me. The characters did not look convincing enough for me. I think some struggled in their own story. This was due to the dialogue which I think for me was the most poorly executed element in the screenplay. All the characters pretty much sounded the same. Each character must have atleast a recognised voice. Also there were huge chunks of dialogue which was more than five lines. Eish. It was like I was reading a speech. Keep the dialogue short as possible. It must be fast yet kill the emotions and character development. You can do so by breaking them with an action line. Another thing is that the structure was not into shape. Follow the 3 act structure and lay the beets nicely. The dramatic question is vital when writing any story more so that this is a series. Each episode must give us to ask a question that leads to a characters objective or goal. I believe u are a good writer. Dont rush in finishing an episode but rather ensure that you finish the story beets. Good luck and God bless u.
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 2 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Cowspiracy Ep 2 television
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
The birth of a baby cow produces hope for a struggling farmer but also an unforseen detrimental magic
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 2 years ago

completed a review for

Again to Love feature
Genre: Romance,Drama
Rating: 20%
I'll be honest. It's a script worth to produce but however it needs to be retouched. In most cases you forgot to show. You told us almost everything. The rule is that if it's not on screen. Cut it out. Write only what we can see. I'll give an example of the opening scene. Where are told that Idunn just received a letter. We don't see that. U could have maybe show a delivery man pass a letter n then she feels great about it. Also it's not clear why our characters relationship ended. It was really unrealistic for Idunn to come back n just confront Andrea if she slept with Victor. Atleast u could have inserted things like she comes back to find a sex tape or something. Most of the things in the story were told n not shown. Another example we are told that Olivia was a compassionate nurse in the description. U were supposed to show it. Add a photo of her in a nurse uniform. Anything that can show us she a retired nurse. Accompanied by her behaviour. We can have an idea that she must have been A good nurse.
IsaacChiswesha
Isaac Chiswesha 2 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Again to Love feature
Genre: Romance,Drama
A college foreign exchange student unintentionally gets involved in a love triangle between two exes and must decide to let her feelings be known, or let them get back together.