Heather Lam

Heather L.

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World's oldest virgin
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Heather Lam 4 years ago

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Tidal High television
Genre: Drama,Comedy,Family
Rating: 20%
A drama/comedy set in a high school is not new, and this particular script reminds me of the TV show Glee - the juxtoposition between the popularity of the cheerleaders and a cheerleading coach with suspicious motives, and the earnest yet shrewd drama teacher that leads the school's musical production, reminds us of the dynamic that was one of the main tenets of Glee. As such, the characters did not seem fairly original. None of them had any discernable traits which made me want to get to know them better. While I appreciate the author's efforts in trying to portray well-rounded, 3-dimensional characters, right from the start, it was particularly difficult to relate to the 3 cheerleaders as I did not know what they were each supposed to represent. The banter and relationship between the 3 of them were also rather dull. The Jackie-Courtney dynamic was the most interesting part of the story and I would have liked to see it further developed. Is Jackie genuinely trying to help Courtney? Or does she have ulterior motives? The dialogue felt stunted and unnatural at several points. Attempting 'Hamilton' with a bunch of theatre newbies also seemed too unrealistic. Given that it's a script for a TV pilot, perhaps the author was trying to do too much by introducing too many characters. It would have been better to focus on a few characters and build the plot around them - this would also give the readers a clearer understanding on what is central to the story and what is peripheral. Overall, the script requires greater clarity on which story it wants as a central tenet. This will help readers understand which characters to root for.
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Heather Lam 4 years ago

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Tidal High television
Genre: Drama,Comedy,Family
Welcome to Tidal High, where drama is always happing. Follow along with Jacob, Mason, Holly and Ruby as they navigate their way through high school with their teacher Courtney Garcia.
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Heather Lam 4 years ago

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World's oldest virgin short
Genre: Drama
Rating: 40%
An original concept that can be explored further - a woman in conversation with the voices in her head. The script was full of suspense and relatively easy to read, and I found myself wanting to reach the end to find out what happened to the protagonist. However, the purpose of having the woman converse with a voice in her head was unclear to me. I went into the story expecting that the woman is in frequent conversation with the voice in her head, but the dialogue made it seem that this is the first time in a long while (26 years, 8 months, and 8 days) that she is hearing this voice. I thought it might have been more interesting to explore the relationship between the woman and the voice, and how the voice has played a role in encouraging the woman in her behaviour and actions. The script, perhaps, could have been longer to allow for this to be explored further. I also did not see the relevance of the title "World's Oldest Virgin" to the story itself. It appeared to have been a throwaway comment. I wished it could have been explored further to give us more insight on why the protagonist behaves the way that she does.
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Heather Lam 4 years ago

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World's oldest virgin short
Genre: Drama
A mentally ill woman hears voices in her head and acts on it.
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Heather Lam 4 years ago

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