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Francisco Alvarez Raineri

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I'm a Bachelor in Audiovisual Arts, specialized in Screenwriting, from Argentina. For the last decade, I've been working as writer and director on extremely low-budget independent projects; including two future-length movies and a handful of short films. I'm looking towards broadening my experience and working in bigger projects.


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Francisco Alvarez Raineri just claimed a review for a script.
4 days ago
Pianola feature
Genre: Drama
Logline: A young pianist at a prestigious university struggles with traumatic events on his path to becoming the greatest musician of all time.
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1 week ago
Again to Love feature
Genre: Romance,Drama
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"Again to Love" is comprised of very little more than the minimum elements to compose a romance. Extremely low character count with not much personality to go around; a single plot-line that runs mostly without conflict; dialogues that work surface-level and with little nuance; scenes that are almost always mono-thematic; and practically no character development to speak of. I will expand on each issue and the do a summary at the end. As far as the reader is concerned, there are only four characters in this universe. One of them is highly secondary, adding very little to the story. The other three unknowingly see themselves involved in a love triangle. This triangle is strongly and fortuitously interconnected: Idunn (an exchange student) wants to be with Will (her hostess son), Will wants to be with Idunn but used to be with Theresa (who wants to be back with him), Theresa is tutoring Idunn and pushing her to date her ex (unknowingly). That it, nobody has any friends or relationships outside this triangle except for Olivia, who is both mum and hostess, and Theresa, who by the end finds another date. Idunn a couple of times talks to or about her family, but they shine by their absence both physically and of relevance. Furthermore, this characters don't present much in terms of personality, except maybe Theresa, who is very forward sexually and prone to sudden anger attacks. Yet the little they do have sometimes get contradicted, as the somewhat shy exchange student presents itself as very fiery by the end, both sexually and socially, without any explanation for the change other the fact that she had sex. I would recommend you populate the script a little bit more and find personalities to tie to the characters, ideally related to the plot. There's basically one plot: the aforementioned love triangle. No character has anything else going on in their lives. Moreover, this plot runs without any real conflict until the 70% mark of the movie, where the fact that there's a potential triangle is revealed. Before that, scenes just put forward two characters meeting each other. One could say getting to know each other, if there's was anything to know, but this characters have almost no background and the little they have, as Will's father dying not long ago, doesn't seem to affect them in the present. After the conflict manifests, it gets resolved immediately. I would recommend, keeping along my first recommendation, that you put in place secondary plots, giving characters more to do, and also have their actions informed by previous events in their lives. Maybe Olivia is moving on with her life and starts dating, maybe that affects Will somehow, maybe Will is emotionally distant after the death of his father and not completely over, maybe that is what caused the breakup so there is a reason to consider getting back together. At the same time, the main love story needs a proper conflict from the get go. Maybe Will is emotionally distant, or Idunn doesn't want to get involved as she is supposed to leave back to Iceland soon, maybe reveal the triangle a lot sooner and find ways to take advantage of it more. "Will they? won't they?" is not present here and should be the core of the plot. Characters usually just put forward exactly whats on their mind without nuance. There's almost no subtext to the lines and no conflict appears from characters misspeaking. I would recommend to get your characters talking about other subjects of interest to them and in more obtuse ways, get some lies in there, get some confusion, get some verisimilitude. Scenes work almost entirely to get some information to the audience or forward the meeting of the main love story. A particularly worrisome case happens on page 6, where Theresa enters the coffe shop and talks to Will just to tell the reader that they know each other and that she is taking on an tutoring, which is immediately after revealed to be Idunn. I would recommend you work in the scenes all my previous recommendations about additional plot-lines, conflict, background, interest. Characters, since they don't have hurdles to get over, don't develop. The only reason Will and Idunn don't immediately start a relationship is that they don't know each other enough. But then they go to a couple dates and the relationship starts. The one point that could've been of conflict, their interrupted first kiss, just gets brushed off as, the next time they meet each other, this is not mentioned at all. They need individual reason not to want to date the other one, twisted reasons that they eventually surpass to do what their heart tells them to do. And therefore grow. In conclusion, characters should have personalities, personalities should be tied to their backgrounds and inform their dialogue; plot should have conflict and related sub-plots; scenes should involve all these levels. This is the bare-bones of a love story. But the bones are there and are good enough. Now you need to add all the meat, so that it feels like a rounded story.

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1 week ago
Again to Love feature
Genre: Romance,Drama
Logline: A college foreign exchange student unintentionally gets involved in a love triangle between two exes and must decide to let her feelings be known, or let them get back together.
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1 week ago
SVF: Reborn (Second Draft) feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Horror,Thriller
Logline: Slaying demons and kicking ass are his specialty.
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1 month ago
The Procidat feature
Genre: Horror,Thriller
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“The Procidat” is a by-the-books horror-thriller script that works perfectly fine in all aspects of this genre’s storytelling while not excelling in any in particular. The main characters are a typical family of a dedicated wife, an absent father and an introverted only child. Their characterization doesn’t really go much further from that, with the exception of the father, who's actually trying to do what’s best for his family despite his flaws. The secondary characters receive even less development, they do work as they are but never manage to go beyond the basics. The evil they face is interesting in a Lovecraftian manner, but the way it is presented, by over-explanatory flashbacks, really deflates the tension and grounds it too much. Having said that, it is refreshing to have a properly horrific being behind the terror, in contrast to the more psychological-base horror that is currently on fashion. On the same line, I also appreciate that the characters react mostly in a logical and intelligent way to everything they face; again, in opposition to the usually dumb and self-defeating decisions we see nowadays in most movies of this genre. Talking about that, one of the points where this praise is more clearly seen is in the dialogue. Characters, after some understandable hesitation, do eventually tell each other what’s happening and what they want to do. And by that I do not mean to say that the dialogue is superficial or over-explanatory, but that characters don’t blubber in-comprehensive noises and actually do talk to each other to solve their problems. At the same time, the characters each have a voice and a way of expressing it. All in all, the dialogues are quite good. The plot is properly built yet never manages to present something truly attention-grabbing. The progression of the supernatural elements is well done, with a nice crescendo. But the logic of the evil and what it wants, even though present with even too much detail, still managed to confuse me. Maybe I’m just not smart enough, but I just couldn’t connect his will with his methods. What’s the point in showing the people that come into the hostel visions if what you want is to steal their son? Why does it want to do that anyway? Does he feed from children’s souls? Does he want to separate the family? What are its powers exactly? How did it survive in the end? How is the physical hotel itself linked to it? At the same time, there’s not much more going on in the script in terms of secondary plots besides the husband remorsefully cheating on the wife. This appears to be somehow connected to the main plot, as if the evil wanted to keep the child for himself because he has bad parents, but this concept is not really explored. The parents have their problems, but they are by no means bad or even negligent. In relation to this, themes and underlying meaning are either quite lacking or I missed them completely.

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1 month ago
The Procidat feature
Genre: Horror,Thriller
Logline: A family on the brink of collapse tries to reconnect at a quaint Bed and Breakfast for the weekend, but a supernatural evil in the house has other plans.
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1 month ago
SVF: Reborn (First Draft) feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Horror,Thriller
Logline: Slaying demons and kicking ass are his specialty.
Francisco Alvarez Raineri completed a review for
1 month ago
Justice for the Damned feature
Genre: Western
Review Rating:

“Justice for the Damned” is an interesting script; a callback to dark, gritty westerns with morally dubious characters sprinkled with more modern sensibilities. The underlying world of the story, intriguing characters and the inciting incident are really strong but, as the plot advances, the lack of depth starts getting increasingly noticeable. By the end, those characters and plot that appeared full of potential and mystery are revealed to have little development overall. In short, “Justice for the Damned” has the missed potential to be an excellent script. The main aspect in need of attention is character development and the plot in relation to it. Steve, the main character, is an ex-outlaw now living a farming life that goes back to his old ways to kill Bill. He starts the script mysterious and hard to read and basically ends the story without change. A change from unloving to loving towards his son is suggested, but this is more of a switch that is triggered by the end than an overarching arc. Steve and his son William travel together for most of the script and yet we get very little bonding time and it’s not even clearly presented as that. William only learns that his father was (or is) an extremely immoral person and Steve only learns that his son is stubborn and not ready for what he is up to. William does kind of pay for the faults in his personality by potentially losing a hand, but this happens by the end of the script and carries no further implications. Steve manages to kill Bill without really facing any of his past or present actions in a highly flat and anti-climatic manner. The rest of the characters are secondary and present similar levels of straightforwardness, with no growth or arc, only life and death. Possibly life-like, but not very cinema-like. The plot wanders too much towards secondary ideas, losing focus on the father-son relationship that appears to fight for center stage constantly. The most clear place this happens is in the very late introduction of a whole new character and situation on page 83. It’s also not free from inconsistencies, but not necessarily world-breaking ones. At the same time, action scenes with extremely high levels of detail extend the length of the script unnecessarily and make for a confusing and somewhat tiresome reading experience. The dialogue is, in general, decent with some really high points and a clear low one. Bill’s monologue extends for too long, is overindulging and is an on-the-nose explanation of everything that happened in the backstory. Sometimes the characters’ voices get a little bit confused, but overall they do have separation and there are some highly memorable, very proper for a western lines. In conclusion, great characters and set-up that are in need of development. Consider giving the characters proper arcs, straightening-out the plot, reducing the descriptions of the action scenes, and using some more of the good old “show, don’t tell”. Good work!

Francisco Alvarez Raineri just claimed a review for a script.
2 months ago
Justice for the Damned feature
Genre: Western
Logline: An ex outlaw turned overweight farmer discovers his old comrade is still alive, and sets out across the chaos of the dying west to confront him.

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Wasted Time
Draft #1
Genre: Comedy,Drama
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Tensions escalate as an inexperienced filmmaker tries to make a documentary about a self-proclaimed time-traveler with a catch, he has no way of proving it.

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