ScriptMother

E Hamilton

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I am a lover of stories! I love to read and review various scripts so if you need a first fifteen request or a review I am the person for you! I hope I can bring you good feedback, critique and positivity! Good luck to everyone! I love all dramas, I am not a prude nothing is too explicit, raunchy or gory for me, just be sure to make it the best story you possibly can!


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Reviews: 14

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E Hamilton just claimed a review for a script.
1 year ago
Tears of a Clown feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Romance
Logline: A surly fighter tries to shake-off a headstrong dancer he rescues from the street but in a twist of fortune, comes to depend upon her for survival.
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Out Of Love feature
Genre: Drama,Romance
Logline: A future love story about a man who loses his wife and slowly falls in love with a girl from another state.
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Soul Power feature
Genre: Drama
Logline: The Night James Brown Saved Boston
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1 year ago
A Happy Home television
Genre: Family,Drama,Comedy
Review Rating:

I don't have much of a critique and I'm sorry if this bothers you when I compare it to things I've watched or read but this honestly reminds me of a more in depth and obviously black version of Full House. It's very current as far as dialogue and language goes. There are a few typos in the beginning like in the description column you wrote Cara leaves the children and I think you mean't Cara leaves the room, also in the teaser you said "outside the luxurious style" and maybe you mean't home or estate??? and there's a few others and I'm sure after a proof read you'll catch them, all of the typos are easy fixes. My favorite character so far is Selena because she was the main focus of the episode but I'm equally interested in the others as well like Faline, Seiana, etc., and I'm also curious about this Derrick character. I know he's dead but he sounds like a very interesting husband and father but not in a good way. There's a certain hint of ominous about this script it reads kind of like a mystery than dark but it's only episode one so maybe the dark part hasn't come in yet. Overall I think the dialogue between the characters is very realistic and it does give off a family vibe. Seiana and Sanaa seem like really good moms and I'm already rooting for the love to develop between Seiana and Domenico! Also Sanaa and Antonio. Not so sure about Faline and this Jaiceano character though he seems like a player and I've definitely had a few Amarie's in my lifetime as I'm sure others have so I'm excited to see where this series goes and more about all the characters and exploring their relationships with one another. Lastly I enjoyed the interrogation scene that Faline and Selena put Domenico through, I hope he passes!

Cyle
I thought you already reviewed this script?
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Carl W
Dude, she wrote it!
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Cyle
I know lol
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Carl W
Not cool!
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Carl W
Not cool!
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Carl W
omg this site is buggy!
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Carl W
I love it though.
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Beja
Thank you for the review!
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Beja
Carl W and Cyle, I don't know what you're implying and I also don't care. I've noticed you two in discord have been complaining a lot and now it appears you've moved from discord to harassing reviewers that you don't agree with not only on your own pages but on the pages of others? It's weird. This is not a site for trolling, it's a site for critiquing, if you end up getting a compliment in the process cool but that's not the purpose of this site and I actually own my own production house and let me fill you two in on something if I was looking for writers to join a writers room I would not hire either of you because your attitudes are piss poor, unprofessional and downright disgusting. And if I recall correctly neither of you could properly format a script until I gave you feedback on how to do so, so why are you upset? Also I have more than one episode of "A Happy Home" listed but I've only bought a review for the first episode, the second episode hasn't passed the first fifteen yet. If you didn't notice I have a plethora of scripts listed but regardless even if you did think it was some kind of cahoots or biased going on you don't leave these type of comments on someone's review. Save that for your own page, you don't harass a reviewer. Which leads me to my conclusion, E. Hamilton I am very sorry that you have to endure this, I hope you'll continue to review my work because your feedback is both encouraging and you're right I do need to proof read and work on character development and dialogue between characters so that it's not so "on the nose" as one reviewer Claire B put it and even a few people on reddit as well, so thank you very much for your feedback. As for the trolling, I've already contacted Script Mother about this and I hope you'll do the same because this type of trolling/ bullying behavior is not ok.
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Beja
Carl W and Cyle, I don't know what you're implying and I also don't care. I've noticed you two in discord have been complaining a lot and now it appears you've moved from discord to harassing reviewers that you don't agree with not only on your own pages but on the pages of others? It's weird. This is not a site for trolling, it's a site for critiquing, if you end up getting a compliment in the process cool but that's not the purpose of this site and I actually own my own production house and let me fill you two in on something if I was looking for writers to join a writers room I would not hire either of you because your attitudes are piss poor, unprofessional and downright disgusting. And if I recall correctly neither of you could properly format a script until I gave you feedback on how to do so, so why are you upset? Also I have more than one episode of "A Happy Home" listed but I've only bought a review for the first episode, the second episode hasn't passed the first fifteen yet. If you didn't notice I have a plethora of scripts listed but regardless even if you did think it was some kind of cahoots or biased going on you don't leave these type of comments on someone's review. Save that for your own page, you don't harass a reviewer. Which leads me to my conclusion, E. Hamilton I am very sorry that you have to endure this, I hope you'll continue to review my work because your feedback is both encouraging and you're right I do need to proof read and work on character development and dialogue between characters so that it's not so "on the nose" as one reviewer Claire B put it and even a few people on reddit as well, so thank you very much for your feedback. As for the trolling, I've already contacted Script Mother about this and I hope you'll do the same because this type of trolling/ bullying behavior is not ok.
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Beja
Carl W and Cyle, I don't know what you're implying and I also don't care. I've noticed you two in discord have been complaining a lot and now it appears you've moved from discord to harassing reviewers that you don't agree with not only on your own pages but on the pages of others? It's weird. This is not a site for trolling, it's a site for critiquing, if you end up getting a compliment in the process cool but that's not the purpose of this site and I actually own my own production house and let me fill you two in on something if I was looking for writers to join a writers room I would not hire either of you because your attitudes are piss poor, unprofessional and downright disgusting. And if I recall correctly neither of you could properly format a script until I gave you feedback on how to do so, so why are you upset? Also I have more than one episode of "A Happy Home" listed but I've only bought a review for the first episode, the second episode hasn't passed the first fifteen yet. If you didn't notice I have a plethora of scripts listed but regardless even if you did think it was some kind of cahoots or biased going on you don't leave these type of comments on someone's review. Save that for your own page, you don't harass a reviewer. Which leads me to my conclusion, E. Hamilton I am very sorry that you have to endure this, I hope you'll continue to review my work because your feedback is both encouraging and you're right I do need to proof read and work on character development and dialogue between characters so that it's not so "on the nose" as one reviewer Claire B put it and even a few people on reddit as well, so thank you very much for your feedback. As for the trolling, I've already contacted Script Mother about this and I hope you'll do the same because this type of trolling/ bullying behavior is not ok.
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E
Cyle & Carl. This was my first time reviewing Beja's script "A Happy Home", I have however reviewed other scripts of hers, if you'll notice she has many. If you'll also notice on most I am not the only one to review her script which is why I don't have a lot of feedback. Did you notice that at the bottom of every script there is a progression bar? Did you ever wonder why Script Mother has that feature? It's to track progress. It's clear that Beja has taken feedback from other reviewers, applied it and then resubmitted drafts in order to achieve the scores she's been getting. If you have an issue with that, then take it up with Script Mother. I know I personally will be doing the same in regard to this childish behavior you two have exhibited. You both sound extremely bitter and I understand why I looked at the reviews on both your pages, Cyle if I'm not mistaken you were even reviewed by an industry peer and only got a 10% rating, am I pretending to be them as well? Or only in this case? You two are obviously not wanting to improve yourselves perhaps in your mind you've already arrived and script mother was just a stepping stone to confirm it if that's the case then the reviews you have received must have been a rude awakening. Please refrain from doing these childish antics and I will be following Beja's lead and reporting you both to script mother, this type of behavior is unacceptable. They don't even allow these types of antics on Tumblr or Reddit, please grow up and be better.
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E Hamilton just claimed a review for a script.
1 year ago
A Happy Home television
Genre: Family,Drama,Comedy
Logline: A lighthearted yet dark family drama about a "widow" whose sister and best friend move in with her to help her raise her three daughters.
E Hamilton completed a review for
1 year ago
Reconstruction television
Genre: History,Drama
Review Rating:

I don't have much of a critique, there's as much dialogue as there is description but luckily all of it can be shot so it's not misplaced or miswritten I should say. I would suggest just maybe cutting it down some otherwise it takes forever to get to the dialogue and it ends up dragging the story. I would also suggest maybe playing around with the title or changing it all together, Reconstruction is kind of a blah title it doesn't really stand out to be honest. The main thing that stood out is that you are lacking transitions; DISSOLVE TO:, CUT TO:, etc. These should be before the slug lines; INT., EXT., POV., and also just making sure you're picking the correct slug lines for each scene. The next thing is just working on dialogue and character development since this is a time piece and the language is intentionally outdated you have to be creative in how it's written and make sure that it flows while also making the audience interested in the characters and at this point even though your characters like David has been through rather traumatic ordeals i.e. slavery, they lack depth. It reads almost as if this comes from biased perspective or how one thinks a slave talked and acted back then, almost like a parody and the dialogue when the freed enslaved are speaking sounds mocking with the overuse of "allelulias" and there appears to be an apparent white savior complex in the beginning with David and Walker or at least I assume David is Black and Walker is white by David calling him sir and Walker using the slur pickaninny I can only guess since the only real description you gave was to the character Alice, so that's the last thing just going back and adding character descriptions. Oh and if it's a TV series you'll want to put the episode list and reoccurring characters at the bottom of the page. Good luck!

E Hamilton just claimed a review for a script.
1 year ago
Reconstruction television
Genre: History,Drama
Logline: At the end of the Civil War, politicians, soldiers, and freed slaves must reckon with a new world order, charting new paths against the still-powerful forces of racial and partisan animus.
E Hamilton completed a review for
1 year ago

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