Hello, I myself am a horror fan and this I really liked. I appreciate horror stories that go all the way with its genre. Obviously a few things grammar wise need working on. Such as put a hyphen in between late teens (late-teens). Also your script descriptions can be smoothened such as: Faint footsteps are heard, distracting the beast from finishing its meal Try Faint footsteps distract the beast from it’s meal. Also, on your headings, such as INT. DUNGEON remember to add NIGHT or DAY at the end of it. Ex: INT. DUNGEON - NIGHT. Your story reminded me a lot of old classic horror movies and that’s a good thing. I hope you continue to work on this with future drafts, I look forward to reading more and see what you do with it in the future. Good luck with your writing and hope you keep at it.
An ill young man gets an unexpected visit from a closet monster.
A young man and his friends try to survive the carnage strange creatures, regenerated by an alien experiment, bring to a small town.