Whilst the action lines are in English, all the dialogue is in a different language I can't read, which is a shame, as I was looking forward to it.
So basically it is impossible to understand what's going on, because I can only read the action lines, and not the dialogue.
If you could get the dialogue translated, I'd love to read it, as I love action / police procedural films.
Also, English seems to not be the writer's native language, so there are some odd turns of phrase, grammar and spelling. However, this could be fairly easily corrected by a script editor.
So my suggestion is write the dialogue in English and get it proof read and corrected. Then resubmit.
I've not got anything more to say, but I have to put in 150 words. I've not got anything more to say, but I have to put in 150 words. I've not got anything more to say, but I have to put in 150 words. I've not got anything more to say, but I have to put in 150 words.
