Chris Dahl

Chris D.

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The Second Coming Draft #1

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God’s plans for the End Times are messed up when Trump & Pence take over the White House.
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Savior-in-Chief Draft #1

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President Donnie gets stuck in The White House security bunker because of some stupid protestors, so he and his pal, AG Bill Barr, cook up a scheme to spring him.
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ChrisDahl
Chris Dahl 1 year ago

uploaded a script.

D*ck Stage television
Genre: Comedy
A high school teacher wonders if he's finally in the "dick stage" of teaching.
ChrisDahl
Chris Dahl 3 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Reconstruction television
Genre: History,Drama
At the end of the Civil War, politicians, soldiers, and freed slaves must reckon with a new world order, charting new paths against the still-powerful forces of racial and partisan animus.
ChrisDahl
Chris Dahl 3 years ago

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Bread and Circuses television
Genre: Comedy,Thriller
Rating: 53%
The strongest parts of the script were the concept and the story: a weird, almost-alien cadre that controls Hollywood talent. This concept, however, seemed introduced a bit into the story and then forgotten for long periods of time. It is billed as a comedy and a thriller. The thriller part could have been enhanced by shadowy appearances of the Monarch Butterfly people here and there, something to suggest that they were constantly surveilling the characters and their every move. Perhaps start with an appearance by them in the opening, an in media res sort of thing to pique the viewer's interest. Then, Act One could switch back to the world of would-be actors and writers in varying stages of their careers. Through the subsequent acts, the shadow world of the Monarch-Butterfly people could be interwoven until they re-appear in force later in the script. I know you were going for a cliff-hanger/teaser at the end there, but I really would have liked something mysterious but more tangible, like some artifact that could point in a few directions. Maybe there could be something that could indicate the actress and the mysterious clan? Form can seem burdensome sometimes, but sometimes it helps in moving the story forward. In this case, making the form much more visible and following a more traditional structure may have allowed for what I just suggested. Overall, I wanted more of the Monarch Butterfly people as a strand and I wanted to be drawn in more quickly. But, hey, this is just my reading of it. It could sell tomorrow, who knows?
ChrisDahl
Chris Dahl 3 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Bread and Circuses television
Genre: Comedy,Thriller
When his best friend is suddenly put on the path to stardom, a writer realizes that Hollywood may be hiding some strange secrets.
ChrisDahl
Chris Dahl 3 years ago

uploaded a script.

Savior-in-Chief feature
Genre: Comedy
President Donnie gets stuck in The White House security bunker because of some stupid protestors, so he and his pal, AG Bill Barr, cook up a scheme to spring him.
ChrisDahl
Chris Dahl 3 years ago

uploaded a script.

The Second Coming feature
Genre: Comedy
God’s plans for the End Times are messed up when Trump & Pence take over the White House.
ChrisDahl
Chris Dahl 3 years ago

just joined ScriptMother!