Caleb Densman

Caleb D.

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The Bench (working title suggestions welcome) Draft #1

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Two Highschool students grapple with the losses they face following an immense tragedy.
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Inheritance Draft #4

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A teenager who has struggled with powerlessness his whole life receives an inheritance that changes everything
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The Dukes of 1010 Draft #1

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3 freinds, one who's fed up with an awful boss, one who wants to get the girl, and one with nothing better to do take matters into their own hands
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The Comet Draft #2

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Ben comes to the Fast Lane bowling alley everyday after school, partly because he idolizes amateur bowler, Jenny "The Comet" Cornell, and partly to escape some dark past.
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The Exterminators: Epispode 1 Draft #1

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Doug is an exterminator in his mid 30's who is struggling with promises he made to his wife and to himself
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Dirty Laundry Draft #1

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Two childhood friends reconnect for the first time in years, while doing laundry of all things.
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CalebDensman
Caleb Densman 2 years ago

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Standing Up television
Genre: Drama
A year after a public reckoning stemming from sexual assault allegations, a disgraced comic and one of his victims separately forge a return to stand-up comedy while dealing with the baggage they carry from the fallout.
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Caleb Densman 2 years ago

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The Exterminators: Epispode 1 television
Genre: Comedy
Doug is an exterminator in his mid 30's who is struggling with promises he made to his wife and to himself
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Dirty Laundry short
Genre: Drama,Romance
Two childhood friends reconnect for the first time in years, while doing laundry of all things.
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Caleb Densman 2 years ago

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The Winston of our discontent feature
Genre: Drama
Rating: 53%
This certainly has the potential to be a really interesting and intriguing script. I already really like both leads. The opening moment with the defibrillator is an excellent introduction to this world and a fun piece of foreshadowing. There isn't a whole lot to go on in terms of character development, but I definitely want to see more of these characters. I think you handle a really difficult topic well, and for the most part do a good job of showing the audience what that can feel like. especially following the first time the two leads interact. What I think holds this screenplay back is that we open on Winston, and he is doing more than just talking to himself, he is monologuing to himself. As someone who talks to myself in a lot of the same ways that Winston does, I think his conversations would be more scattered, and go through a whole range of emotions beyond his woe is me attitude. With your other character you do an excellent job of show don't tell. you show us the posters on the wall, therefore we don't need to have the fact that she is depressed beaten over our heads. I think you need to work on finding a method of doing that with Winston. It was two or three lines before I realized he was talking to God. I also think you need to find a way to showcase more of Winston's background. He seems to know a lot about religion, but not enough for me to distinguish whether he grew up around religion, or the writer did. Overall a great concept with tons of potential.
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Caleb Densman 2 years ago

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The Winston of our discontent feature
Genre: Drama
Two introverts find love in the most unlikely place - suicide... or do they?
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Dirty Laundry short
Genre: Drama,Romance
Two childhood friends reconnect for the first time in years, while doing laundry of all things.
CalebDensman
Caleb Densman 2 years ago

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Dirty Laundry short
Genre: Drama,Romance
Two childhood friends reconnect for the first time in years, while doing laundry of all things.
CalebDensman
Caleb Densman 3 years ago

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The Exterminators: Epispode 1 television
Genre: Comedy
Doug is an exterminator in his mid 30's who is struggling with promises he made to his wife and to himself
CalebDensman
Caleb Densman 3 years ago

uploaded a script.

The Exterminators: Epispode 1 television
Genre: Comedy
Doug is an exterminator in his mid 30's who is struggling with promises he made to his wife and to himself
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Caleb Densman 3 years ago

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Promise short
Genre: Thriller,Mystery/Suspense,Drama
Rating: 60%
This script is very good. I will be completely honest when I saw that it was only 4 pages my expectations were extremely low, I was pleasantly surprised. In fact as someone who spends most of their time in writing shorts, this is a master class in short film writing, and I would love to make it but that's besides the point. I love how even in your synopsis you preserve the twist. As I was reading I was sure that somehow Candice would be Elise, I mean I didn't believe her story for a second, which made the twist all that much more earned to me. The dialogue is excellent, the character's feel fleshed out and real, aside from a couple of lines with a little bit too much vocabulary I thought. a couple of times it read more like poetry than dialogue, which is fine, I would trim it down just a bit. The only other criticism I could possibly have is not that it is too short, but it could be longer, you could build up to the twist even further if you wanted, but I don't think you need to by any means. All in all great script, and somebody could make I'm sure an award winning short of it.