I will start with a concept. I haven't seen a lot of Vampire or undead monk movies. All I can reflect on is "Transilvania," "Twilight," and other parts connected with "Twilight." Must say, I am not the biggest fan of vampire movies, but this one was something different. I could say it was variety in my eyes. Maybe it is, or perhaps it is not a completely original story, though it was interesting to read-a cocktail mix.
Now about the first ten pages. On the one hand, the first 2-3 pages were easy to read, but on the other hand, the reader might get lost easily. An action was already following at the beginning, which is fantastic, although hard to understand what is happening. Shortly, on the screen, everything would look impressive.
Scene writing. The majority of the scenes are written well. Part, where the action was more, could separate it, even more, being more specific.
In the beginning, I thought Brother Margaret was the villain. Type of dialogue and ideas, conversations about killing were confusing, and only after the 13th page, I fully understood the main character. Calm, understandable, and soft-that is a match. The gap was beautifully filled up with other characters.
Along with the story, I had difficulties to read it. Lots of complicated words, however, a lot of action. Either there has to be good dialogue, either a lot of action. But I will admit, no big cons.
The end was incomplete. The ending did not meet my expectations. Not saying "the end" should always end excellent or happy, NO! But the story could settle entirely differently. To me, it seemed CUT. Like the writer did not had time to finish it. Rushed, no explanation why so. Action after action, a conversation between family, and then you are waiting for the final countdown. Still, there was a final countdown; the only problem-it was short. As I said previously, the narrative was going right. It was flowing, but I can not process the ending. Suggest to rewrite or shape the ending; it should be better. There should be something more significant.
