My first reaction to reading this is to ask, who is the audience? This seems to be a children's cartoon, but has many mature moments, especially with dialogue. Including guns in cartoons, especially in today's climate, is difficult to pull off, and this story doesn't pull it off. I don't see how this dialogue would resonate with children as well. Booksy is cynical and self-describes as anti-social. We've seen these types of characters in cartoons before, so we know they can work. In this instance, I think it would be wise to pair him off with a character that can provide balance. Chippy might be that character but is unable to speak. I suggest giving them a voice. If you wish not to do that, then his actions need to be his dialogue. They should be specific, concise, and let the audience know exactly what he is saying. This may be difficult however if he is to balance some of the complex personality traits of Booksy.
